I read the summary before clicking on the first chapter, and it grabbed my attention from the get-go. The layout is simple, but cute. Easy on the eye.
Chapter 1 From the very beginning, I like where this is going. Going to a movie premiere and after party. I think that's pretty unique in a story. I don't know. I'm just really interested already.
I really like how you introduce this mysterious guy that walks in that she obviously knows and doesn't want to talk to, but you don't tell the reader who he is or why she's avoiding him. It really makes me want to read on.
Chapter 2 Aw, dang, that's so sad.
I like how you wrote this as sort of a closure piece. Like they meet and they know they love each other, but they're not in love with each other, so it's sort of where they actually let go which is really important when you break up with someone.
Chapter 1
From the very beginning, I like where this is going. Going to a movie premiere and after party. I think that's pretty unique in a story. I don't know. I'm just really interested already.
I really like how you introduce this mysterious guy that walks in that she obviously knows and doesn't want to talk to, but you don't tell the reader who he is or why she's avoiding him. It really makes me want to read on.
Chapter 2
Aw, dang, that's so sad.
I like how you wrote this as sort of a closure piece. Like they meet and they know they love each other, but they're not in love with each other, so it's sort of where they actually let go which is really important when you break up with someone.