I love this story so much, it's really good and I can't wait for you to update. Also, I wanna thank you so much because Eli has become the inspiration for my boy name(:
So really can't wait until the next chapter! I really liked the plot twist with the dealer taking part of the bet. I hope nothing super bad happens to Eli though...
Well from the title I really didn't know what to expect, after seeing the layout I was still none the wiser. I like your first chapter, it's very well written and hooked me straight away. You descriptions are excellent and your use of language is good. I read this full thing in one go so my eyes are hurting now, but it was worth it for sure!
*Comment Swap* First off, I really like your writing style! The dialogue flows nicely and there were only a few grammar errors that I saw! I think you could use your writing style to your advantage by writing something more unique! don't get me wrong, this story is great, but there are thousands of stories like this! I think you could write something really great if you brought your mind to it!