Guardian Angel - Comments

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So, I will admit that stories like this just aren't my cup of tea up front. With that having been said, this is a stylistically wonderful piece of work. You manage to express a lot of emotion without wandering into the realm of purple prose, and I appreciate Andrew's confusion upon waking up dead. You write very well, my friend. Keep it up.

I got this for comment swap, yo! B)
So, I will admit that stories like this just aren't my cup of tea up front. With that having been said, this is a stylistically wonderful piece of work. You manage to express a lot of emotion without wandering into the realm of purple prose, and I appreciate Andrew's confusion upon waking up dead. You write very well, my friend. Keep it up.

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TipsyTheKitty:

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This was really nice. Your writing style is very easy to read and just the way you word and place scenes make it very easy for me to picture in my mind. Also, while I don't usually like very plain layouts, yours goes decently with the story. But I do recommend adding a little something like a little color or even a small image that makes you think of the story. You don't have to, just my opinion, just a thought. Your characters are very nicely portrayed to, you can get a real feel for how they feel and think. Any way, it was a nice story and I hope you update soon. Keep writing! :3

AClockworkLove:

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I'm very glad I was brought here. Overall, I was impressed. I like how you really thought out and described situations, and relationships. Mostly, they are realistic, and that is extremely heartening. I loved your allusion to The Lovely Bones, it was easily recognized, and brought the situation to a definite point in emotion, if that makes sense. I hope to keep reading.
One suggestion though, the serif font was a bit disorienting in the second chapter. I don't know if that can be fixed, but, nonetheless, your writing was spot on.

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I'm very glad I was brought here. Overall, I was impressed. I like how you really thought out and described situations, and relationships. Mostly, they are realistic, and that is extremely heartening. I loved your allusion to The Lovely Bones, it was easily recognized, and brought the situation to a definite point in emotion, if that makes sense. I hope to keep reading.
One suggestion though, the serif font was a bit disorienting in the second chapter. I don't know if that can be fixed, but, nonetheless, your writing was spot on.

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This was really nice. Your writing style is very easy to read and just the way you word and place scenes make it very easy for me to picture in my mind. Also, while I don't usually like very plain layouts, yours goes decently with the story. But I do recommend adding a little something like a little color or even a small image that makes you think of the story. You don't have to, just my opinion, just a thought. Your characters are very nicely portrayed to, you can get a real feel for how they feel and think. Any way, it was a nice story and I hope you update soon. Keep writing! :3

You write very cleanly, which is refreshing. The only real constructive comment I can give you is that there is a strange combination in your writing of just enough detail to make it real but not uninteresting and reading almost like a summary. It all feels like it's moving very fast, though you are taking your time, mostly. I'm not saying that this is bad; it isn't. It's more of an observation.

Overall, this is very well written. I'm interested to see were this is going.

One last thing: I would like to say that you are talented at giving personality to characters when you've only briefly mentioned them. That is uncommon. Nicely done.

First of all, I like your layout.:) the stars hurt my eyes a little, but a creative layout none the less.:) the prologue was short and sweet and made me smile and go, "AWW!" Be proud because it's hard to get emotion out of me. The beginning of the second chapter made my heart drop though.:( So sad! I didn't spot any grammar or spelling mistakes so great job on that aspect! You are very talented and I am glad that Comment Swap had brought me here!:)

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I love the idea of your story, it's so sweet. I've only read the first two chapters but they are so good. You have such talent! And the layout was super easy for me to read, I like that. I didn't see any mistakes in your story, good job!