Violent Delights - Comments

  • Cosmic Gerbil

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    Comment swap :) I like the characters' names; they feel like they fit really well into the world of Harry Potter. Blimey, Slughorn just keeps on and on going; he must be ancient now but it was good to see he's still around. I laughed at the pot on the train; I wonder what Dumbledore would have though about some of his students smoking weed xD
    July 18th, 2014 at 12:23am
  • The Lovecraft

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    @ ironi1234 Thank you! The second chapter is now posted
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    April 9th, 2013 at 10:32pm
  • ironically1234

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    ~Comment Swap~
    So first of all I'm a huge potterhead and I was so happy to get this. The title is pretty catchy and made me curious about the story. The first chapter is great. I like your writing style and the fact you already begin to develop Saharas character. Good job!
    April 9th, 2013 at 09:56pm
  • Lady.V.

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    Dear author, first of all let me tell you that I'm not into this kind of fan fiction but I liked the fact the story takes place after the "Harry Potter" series that was published by the rightful owner. The summary and the story's title caught my attention, so you did a good job with that. Editing the first chapter is something you have to do seeing as there are a few writing mistakes but I enjoyed the details. Keep it up. ~Marian.
    April 9th, 2013 at 05:10pm
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    Dear author, first of all let me tell you that I'm not into this kind of fan fiction but I liked the fact the story takes place after the "Harry Potter" series that was published by the rightful owner. The summary and the story's title caught my attention, so you did a good job with that. Editing the first chapter is something you have to do seeing as there are a few writing mistakes but I enjoyed the details. Keep it up. ~Marian.
    April 9th, 2013 at 05:10pm
  • The Lovecraft

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    @Freakette
    Thank you for your comment! Indeed that was probably what happened. I wish I could tell you I have the time and patience to properly edit my writings, but this is more of a way for me to have a creative outlet, because I deal with wayyy less artistic things on a daily basis :P
    April 9th, 2013 at 08:17am
  • Freakette

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    I adore your writing style, your words flow very well, although there are some grammatical errors. An example, "but her skin crawled with disgust at crass stupidity could sometimes be found in the halls of Hogwarts". Did you start editing the sentence and then moved to something else before you finished?
    April 9th, 2013 at 01:15am