Revenant - Comments

this fucking story.

that's all i've got. this is so brilliant.

I have way too many feels from this story.

First, I'm glad I didn't read this at night because it was pretty freaking scary. I got so immersed in what was going on though, that I couldn't stop reading no matter how freaky everything got.

You wrote about a dead girl haunting someone so well, which is really awesome to me considering I'm sure you've never actually experienced that.

I like how well you managed to link all of the chapters together, even though they were all based off of different songs. They all flowed together really well, and you connected them all fantastically.

My favourite thing about the story though, I think, was how you managed to keep up a spooky kind of feel through the entire thing. You created a really great tone for your story and kept it up the whole way through and I thought that was awesome.

Well done!

You're scary.

This is intriguing, everything kept my interest, the wording, the description, even the simple layout... I love the plot! just wow! I have nothing bad to say about this if I'm honest! Good Job I'm glad you recommended it!

I really like how simple the layout is, the colors go well together and aren't distracting. It's simple and nice.

To be honest I was pretty confused within the first chapter, I had a hard time understanding it but I feel like maybe it might just be me. I think the first chapter was very well written nonetheless.

So yeah I read all the chapters you had posted. After piecing together what was going on (i'm extremely slow with cases like these) I was pretty shocked. This is some heavy and creepy shit, and I love it
I know you recommended this to me before and I had put it off but I'm really happy I decided to read it tonight. Except the fact that I had read it at night, it's too creepy.

I'm sorry I haven't posted a comment in a while, though I was just recently looking back at the contest and through the stories and especially this one again xD I've loved all the chapters thus far, and I honestly can't wait for you to post the fifth! I have a question though, if you don't mind. Do you plan on stopping after the fifth chapter, or will you continue after? Just a thought. And that's what I came to say ^_^" Keep up the amazing work!

Your style and voice is so different than anything I have ever read. I loved it.

Wow, I loved your characters personality until I realized she's dead and that's why there's no emotion.

Interesting plot and it's so different which is good :) I enjoyed this very much.

I apologize for taking so long in commenting on your story for the comment swap you offered on the blogs; I finally have time though, so here it goes.

I always do my comments in parts, focusing on one thing at a time so I don't lose grip of what I want to say.

First, the layout; I love the softness of it; it contrasts amazingly with this eerie haunting feeling that the banner gives; upon reading the story, I think you chose a brilliant layout: melancholic, haunting, yet a bit soft.
The tile is beautiful. Simple and haunting, like the entire feeling and plot of your story.

Now onto the plot. I was originally going to read only one chapter, but this story is brilliant; I especially love how you slowly unveil what happened between the characters; it adds a lot to the characterization and allows us (readers) to form our own opinions of each character before knowing the real story.

Another thing I loved was the way you use music to write each chapter; I love it when stories have playlists, so this helped me get more in the mood of the story than anything.

Your descriptions are very vivid, and I especially liked how well you described and portrayed how an obsession can turn into something dangerous. I was raging by the chapter of Warnings Unheeded because of this sense of entitlement that Lou had over Greer, as if she owed him something for being her friend. Stories that get my feelings like this are rare, so I absolutely loved how well you played with the readers' strings in this.

Overall, I think this is an amazing story and I am very curious as to where this is going; I'm going to subscribe in hopes of reading more soon.

I apologize, double post.

Wow, that was really good. Although I'm not really into dead people coming back and haunting the people who killed them, I will have to say this story pretty good.

I like how in the 1st chapter, the readers don't know whether or not the main character is alive or not and then throughout the story you realize she is dead and has come back as a ghost.

I also enjoyed the amount of detail you poured into the story. It really helped me paint a clear picture in my mind.

By the way, I love the layout!

So that last chapter actually kind of freaked me the fuck out. I have a friend who's been asking me out for like the last five years. No joke he says that shit to me all the time. "You never gave me a chance, we could be so good together, yada, yada." He's kissed me a few times and I'm always like bleck no. But that actually kind of scared me a bit haha.

But anywho. This is seriously really amazing, and I have nothing but good things to say about it. I'm in love with the way you write and just perfection. Update soon. ;)

I've only just read the first chapter but holy poop this is good. Literally nothing about this is bad. I found one little grammatical error but other than that this is perfection. The way you describe the room and how you manage to make the body seem so much more mysterious than it is. I was honestly thinking that she and Lou had killed someone together and then PLOT TWIST it's actually her that's dead and she's a ghost. So brilliant/ I'm subscribing and reading more of this/ It's beautiful.

This story is dark and mysterious in every way -the writing, the characters and even the setting.

I was very confused with the first chapter, I didn't understand what was happening at all but later on, I understood a lot better. Chapter after chapter, you've made the story clearer and a lot better.

The last update you had was the best because I finally was able to understand a bit of their past. It's beautiful, really. And I can't wait for the next update!

This is so beautiful and inspiring in a dark way. The way you write is so detailed and superb, and the chapters aren't tediously long. In the beginning, it took me a while to figure out that she was dead xD I didn't see any grammar mistakes, like, at ALL and the layout is so pretty. Since I'm fascinated with things like this, so it's right up my ally in terms of plot.

Over all, amazing job. I'll definitely keep reading it

The only thing I have in common with Lou, is a bit of creepy obsession. Though instead of being obsessed with Greer, I'm pretty infatuated with this story.
I really like that this chapter was set mainly before her death, and contained the events leading up to it. It also showed that Lou's feelings for Greer didn't have any solid ground, because she didn't lead him on.
This really shouldn't be so addictive.

This is really interesting I love your idea behind this its riveting and touching, your description is amazing! As for errors I didn't spot none as I read, well none that stopped me from reading anyway A great job definitely staying tuned :)

I'm growing increasingly annoyed at mibba for not sending me notification emails, otherwise I would have read the latest part sooner.

Anyway.
Geez, even I'm freaked out and she's not even haunting me! You do such a superb job when it comes to description, especially since it's first person pov and that's usually harder. I think ghostly reflections are the scariest thing.

Another brilliant (and disturbing) chapter.

First off, the summary is really intriguing. I love how it appears to be a quote from the story, and what's said is in all honesty, a bit spooky, which makes me all the more curious to read more.

Whoa.
That basically sums up my reaction to those first two chapters. They were simply stunning. You seem to write in such an effortless style, but with description and feeling. And the reveal that the narrator is actually deceased? Murdered no less, by the man she now haunts. It's so imaginative.

I wish I could offer something of use in my comment, but I'm too busy swooning right now. I wouldn't change a thing. This story has gotten under my skin, just as the main character is getting under Lou's.

I don't say this often, but I can hand on heart confess that I'm utterly jealous of your writing ability. If I could steal your talent, I would.

Wow, it took me to the end to realize that she was dead and why he wasn't replying to her lol Just so you know, there are a couple of grammer errors in the beginning -you said shift when I think you meant shifted unless that was intentional- but other than that, I love the detail and feeling -or lack there of- you put into this!