April 13th, 2013 at 03:29am
Dear Maybe James,
This is by far my favorite short story. I thought you captured Elizabeth's essence, and the kind of person she was. I would advise that you go through and edit a bit, there were a lot of things repeated that could have been cut out. It is obvious your love for her shows through, it is in every look your character gives her, every carefully written action she preforms. Over all your piece was great, a bit more description of maybe Elizabeth's features could show your readers how much your other character loved her, but nonetheless it's a wonderful piece.
Please keep writing. :)
-Rosi
Thanks so much for the great comment! I'll definitely take your advice and go through it again