Crazy. - Comments

'A smirk tugged at the corners of his mouth and he let it slide onto his face, eyes glowing..
Valium, Percocet, Celesta. '

what else can i say... great chapters you created there, i like your style and now i'm stalking the rest of your stories...

very nice. this is so good, maybe cause it's gerard who is the tough guy and not jeph. maybe cause i thought it would have been the other way round and you just wrote it turned upside down. it's good. and i love how you play with the words, the whole i am i am i am..., like:

'First, third, second, third, first.
I am the gears themselves, turning turning turning turning, breaking breaking breaking.'

plus, you don't explain shit. that makes it even more better. sometimes we just don't need to know every detail.

(finally a jeph/gerard story. i've been looking for those for months now...)
first chapter here is great. more than great. you have your own style and don't copy the usual descriptions or anything and - well - it's already exciting.
looking forward to read more of this!

Oh...oh my fucking god.
I don't even know any words to describe this.
Indescribable, no, amazing.
Dear God this story is amazing.

Why the hell does this only have eight comments? It deserves like eighty. This is great. I love the way you write. Its incredible. It makes me just want to keep reading and reading and reading. Keep up the great work.

I love it wifey. :arms:

Tis amazing. I'd marry the story but... you're already my wife... so, I can't get out of it. Maybe I'll have an affair? No. I wuffs you, too much.

I must agree with the person above me, I love how Jeph and Gerard act. They seem too real, but in a good way. If that makes sense, I couldn't see either of them acting different than they do.

Oh my god. It's heartbreaking.
Jeph did something wrong, and all we see is his side. Gerard's trying to save him, to help him, but he doesn't know what to do either.
It seems so real.

First, third, second, third, first.
I loved that repitition. Everything is crowding Jeph's mind.

Something I really love is how... harsh? Gerard is. You can't really be nice to someone who murdered then blew up your apartment, but it's obvious he's unstable. I love Gerard's character, and Jeph is endearing. His confusion and hurt brings an aura of innocence, but in the back of our minds, we know he's nothing but.

This is amazing, as are you.

Le Gasp



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AWESOME story so far, dahling.

the description?...

srsly, you and Ali are my idols.

wowowowowowowowowowowow

More soonish, loverly?

Luvs you!

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Descripttionnn! I love it. I love it more than... things I love. Just...woah.

This chapter - whether it was meant to or not - actually shed more light on Gerard's state of mind, rather than Jephas. I mean, Jepha, he feels bad. He's haunting by it. The sound, smell, sight... everything. And the way he talks, stuttering, panicked.

“I d-don’t k-know,” I sobbed out. “I’m t-trying, but it’s s-so fucking hard, b-because I mean, god – he’s dead. I d-did that.”

He realises what he's done is wrong. True, he killed someone, which means its obvious hes not of sound mind, but he still feels remorse.

Gerard on the other hand...

“Let it go,” he stated, going over and opening the curtains to the hotel windows. “It’s over, babe. Done with. Dead. Taken care of. Burned.”

He's far too calm. Collected. He's just destroyed the evidence of a murder, and it now planning to run away with the murderer. Loved one or not, a normal person wouldn't be that calm. They wouldn't be able to do that so easily. Which makes me think either Gerard is the truly 'crazy' one, or that hes largely involved with making Jepha act the way he did.

But who knows. I'm just speculating.

But yes; it's amazing. Absoloutely amazing.
I love it. I love you.

More when you can. :arms:

oh my, that was amazing. I loved the range of vocab you used, the way you described everything. Truly great.

Plus I could feel how scared Jepha was, while at the same time I felt annoyed like Gerard, through his speech. So, kudos to you for bringing out both the character's emotions.

:cheese: :cheese:

And then I was puking up the secrets and sorrows held in my stomach, washing it down the sewage, scared of the underlying meaning; it had taken everything in me to walk back out into the living room of the penthouse, my heart stuck in my throat, glued to my throat.

Ahh, the description! Puking up the secrets and sorrows held in my stomach - I absoloutely adore that line. It's powerful in an unusual way, and it fits him just...perfectly.

I see you've caught the crazy person bug. :tehe:
Enjoyable, isn't it?

I'm really intrigued about what's going on here. Who did he kill? Why did he do it? Why was Gerard - I think it was Gerard - so calm about it? I mean sure, he wasn't uberly calm, but anyone normal person who found out their friend/boyfriend - whatever he is - would have reacted far different than that. Screaming and shouting and calling 911, most probably.

But he just destroyed the evidence and fled - that is not the reaction of someone morally confined. Although it's obvious who is suposedly crazy here, it makes me question Gerard's sanity too.

Needless to say, I can't wait to see where this is going.

You're amazing. :arms:

Definitely really good. It flowed together very well. xD

Now you've got me hooked. Especially since I've never read a Jepha Howard/Gerard Way pairing.

new story.
chaptered/incomplete
It won't be long, I expect it to be just ten or so chapters. When I cut it off, I suppose.
R.
Reviews are love.

Happy -?- Reading?