I love Bleach and your story has a lot of potential! However I think you're summary should be shortened as it's a bit tedious to read, perhaps making it a prologue would have been better Another thing is that the inconsistency with the description under the chapter number, I think you should either put a description for each chapter or not at all, just so that it looks better.
I'm sorry if it seems like I'm picking on you but I just want to help improve your story!
Edit: I had no idea you had so many Bleach stories! That's awesome! I think I better stalk your walk
I'm sorry if it seems like I'm picking on you but I just want to help improve your story!
Edit: I had no idea you had so many Bleach stories!