Waiting Inside - Comments

I wanted to squeal and squeak out loud when I saw this was a fan-fiction for Creature Feature. They are my faaavorite, oh my god.

I'm going to have to agree with someone else. Amanda grates on my nerves something fierce and if that's how you intended for her to be, I give you kudos. The sibling thing is fitting -- childish, but fitting. Amanda just seriously grates on my nerves. The imagery of this story is absolutely perfect. I can see it all in my head as if I really were watching a horror movie.

I am wickedly in love with this already and would much appreciate if you updated, please and thank you.

@ viralstorm

Thank you so much for that. It means a lot to me, seriously. I would definitely keep you in mind for the future. I'm trying to make it go a bit faster, but I wanted to step the characters up because in most horror movies the characters are just thrown in.

Let me start off by saying that after I have already read three or four of your stories, I kinda thought I knew what to expect. When I saw the layout I found myself smirking all "haha this is gonna be good." You definitely didn't let me down, love. I am seriously in love with your creative writing skills. Please work with me on something in the future. It would make my year to work with someone as talented as you. I think we could write something insanely good.

Amanda really gets on my nerves. Haha. The whole sibling thing really clicks, because siblings really do fight like this, but gah! I wanted to punch her every time she opened her mouth just about. I'm usually not a violent person, I swear! The house in the picture kinda reminds me of the house from Bates Motel and that is seriously creepy. Bahaha. The story itself got off to a slow start, but I realize that you had to get in all of that information in order for us to better understand that the characters and how they got to the new house. I like that it wasn't "they moved in and GHOSTS." Or whatever it is that's wrong.

I definitely can't wait to see where this is headed. I think this has a lot of potential, plus I'm always down for a good horror story.

@ partyhostile

THEY ARE MY FAVORITE BAND!

Thank you so much for those kind words.

I legit went "SQUEEE!" when I saw Creature Feature in the summary. I love that band so much.
Anyways, back to your story, hehe.
First off, I love the character name choice, I love the name Emily. And I've never lost a parent, so I can't say I know how the poor girl feels. I'm also the eldest of two, so I don't know what it's like to have an older sibling look down on me because I've said something to upset a parent.
I also can relate, because I too have moved around before. It hurts leaving things behind and that you just don't want to let go of.
Your imagery is spot-on, I can picture everything that's happening so far to Emily, you've developed her character so perfectly. I give you kudos, and I am subscribing! ♥

@ Usako

I've read stories where the mothers die and they don't settle right. I'm making sure her mom's death is actually a piece in the plot and her character development, not just placed so the character can have "pain". Same with other cliché things I'm going to have in the story. Maybe it will break the mold, or go horribly wrong. I'm hoping it will be better with twists and turns. Thank you!

I'm always a little wary of female protagonists who lose their moms because they can turn out horribly, but you execute Emily perfectly. But then again, this is you we are talking about; I should expect nothing less! The relationships between Emily and her family are so realistic, especially the sibling relationship between her and Amanda. I know that I love my own brother to bits, but we fight like cats and dogs sometimes!

As this is under the horror and thriller section, I cannot wait to see what develops. If it's anything like your Bloody Mary fanfic, I will absolutely adore it. Supernatural stories always get me, hook line and sinker. Can't wait to read more!

I've heard of Creature Feature, but haven't heard them. Maybe I should do that tonight!

@ sydni.

They are a really cool band if you like Horror. I like that they tell stories with each song. If you want to listen to the song that inspired this story you can click on the picture of the Ghost Hunting logo in the summary.

Her mother's death may not have a major role, but it made her grow. If that makes sense. I'm truly sorry for your own mother. I've only lost grandparents; I can't imagine my dad or my mom not being here anymore. Again, I really sorry.

I've heard of the band Creature Feature but I can't say I've ever listened to them. I like this story, you have a really good start. The summary drew me in and I feel for Emily, because I too have lost my mother. I can also relate to what her father is going through. After my mother's death, my dad moved me and my brother all around the states until we finally settled back in NC. Anywho, seeing I'm getting off track...this story is just really good. I really don't know what else to say. I plan on subscribing and recommending. I didn't spot any mistakes, and I really can't wait to see where you plan on taking this. I hope you go into the mother's death and I plan on listening to some Creature Feature tonight. c:

@ Grand Duchess Hina

Thank you for pointing that out. Just fixed it!

You know really like this story. You have such a strong start, which is always a plus in my book. It’s sad that Amanda and Emily’s mom died a few years prior to the story. I wonder if you’re going to explain how she died. I’m also wondering what’s going to happen to Emily and her family when they get to their new house?

I didn’t really see any mistakes except for in a sentence where sight should have been sighed (in the first sentence of the sixth paragraph(?)), but other than that, you did a really nice job with the first job, and it makes me want to read more.

I love the story banner you have and the summary is short but to the point. It really draws me in. I’m glad you suggested this story in our swap. I can’t wait to read more. :)