The Sixth Station - Comments

From reading the description, I can honestly say that I have no idea what was going to happen in the story. No idea. Maybe I was missing something, but that can be a good and bad thing. The title is interesting nonetheless. I love how you write, it is similarly to my own, very much so and allows you to create a vivid image in your mind about the circumstances the characters are involved in. Your chapters are really long, and that could be a turn off. I would recommend breaking up some of your chapters as well, because some seem to go on forever. As far as your layout goes, it is beautiful, but I would also recommend making it justified alignment, not right as it aids in reading (I'm sorry I'm being nit picky). Otherwise, I have no more complaints and hope you continue further! Best of luck xx

Comment Swap- Oh my gosh, your writing is sensory. The description in this story is so rich and incredible! You have so much detail and it really paints a picture in the reader's mind. There is definitely talent here!!! I simply adore you layout, how on earth did you do that? What I would suggest is spacing out your story a bit more, just so it is easier to read. Overall, well done! Keep writing!

From comment swap

Your title was great, allowed me to ponder a bit. Although the grey against the black words killed my eyes, I had to stop reading by the middle of the first chapter. Or what I thought was the middle, your chapters are too long, well, I felt they were too long. Your descriptions are also a bit overkill, it didn't keep my attention up very well. Your character is very well developed awesome job. Also, your summary was amazing but I don't think you have to say so much because certain things were just perfect and summed up majority of that entire summary. Although some of it sounded like a vent? Almost. Other than that it's pretty good, sorry I couldn't read anymore.

I suggest spacing up paragraphs. It's easier to read that way.

This seems nice though so keep it up. c: