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  • Kingsgirl77

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    @ Thatmom
    Awe! Thank you so much! You just made my day :)
    January 6th, 2014 at 03:41am
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    @ Thatmom
    Awe! Thank you so much! You just made my day :)
    January 6th, 2014 at 03:40am
  • Thatmom

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    You are an amazing writer and I will wait for anything new. I hope things are going well for you:)
    January 6th, 2014 at 02:45am
  • ThyLord

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    @ Kingsgirl77
    I hope everything works out :)
    July 8th, 2013 at 10:38am
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    @ Chasing Cars
    Thanks so much!
    July 8th, 2013 at 07:43am
  • Kingsgirl77

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    @ LordBieber
    He is doing much better but he will still be in the hospital for a while for recovery.
    July 8th, 2013 at 07:43am
  • Chasing Cars

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    Hey(: I really love this story. I also thought that the layout was done really well. It was tasteful. I love how real the characters feel. I find it to be a lovely story. Well done!(: oh, and hopefully everything is alright with your family(:
    July 7th, 2013 at 06:12pm
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    @ Kingsgirl77
    How is your dad doing?
    July 5th, 2013 at 03:15pm
  • Kingsgirl77

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    Thank you
    June 29th, 2013 at 08:08am
  • ThyLord

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    Oh god, i hope he's ok. You and your family are in my prayers. Take your time and update whenever.
    June 28th, 2013 at 02:07pm
  • Kingsgirl77

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    @ renee8711
    Thanks
    June 28th, 2013 at 03:58am
  • renee8711

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    Praying for you and your family!!
    June 28th, 2013 at 03:51am
  • ThyLord

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    awesome chapter, keep going!
    May 28th, 2013 at 05:04pm
  • ThyLord

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    Please continue
    May 25th, 2013 at 06:34pm
  • coyle;

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    He's such a sweetie. :)
    May 6th, 2013 at 04:44am
  • kayk33

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    Continue for sure :)
    April 27th, 2013 at 05:59pm
  • Kingsgirl77

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    @ holli_simba
    Thanks so much! I will keep that in mind next time I write! I found the layout on this website, I'm not creative enough to make it!
    April 21st, 2013 at 07:46pm
  • holli.sullivan.sykes

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    Hi, I'm from comment swap!

    I love your layout; it's simple and beautiful! The only thing I can criticize is your punctuation, because you don't always use it correctly. An example:

    "Hey Mike" I spoke first.

    "Kayla" Was all he said. He stood there for another minute. "What are you doing here? I haven't heard from you in nine years"


    Should be:

    "Hey, Mike." I spoke first.

    "Kayla," was all he said. He stood there for another minute. "What are you doing here? I haven't heard from you in nine years."


    Other than the lack of punctuation after your dialogue (and some misuse in-between), this is a pretty well-written chapter! I definitely think that you should continue!

    x,
    Holli
    April 21st, 2013 at 07:31pm
  • coyle;

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    I like this so far.. it's a different from other stories when they have kids because they're usually babies or toddlers, so this is a refreshing change!
    April 21st, 2013 at 05:27pm