Hey(: I really love this story. I also thought that the layout was done really well. It was tasteful. I love how real the characters feel. I find it to be a lovely story. Well done!(: oh, and hopefully everything is alright with your family(:
I love your layout; it's simple and beautiful! The only thing I can criticize is your punctuation, because you don't always use it correctly. An example:
"Hey Mike" I spoke first.
"Kayla" Was all he said. He stood there for another minute. "What are you doing here? I haven't heard from you in nine years"
Should be:
"Hey, Mike." I spoke first.
"Kayla," was all he said. He stood there for another minute. "What are you doing here? I haven't heard from you in nine years."
Other than the lack of punctuation after your dialogue (and some misuse in-between), this is a pretty well-written chapter! I definitely think that you should continue!
I like this so far.. it's a different from other stories when they have kids because they're usually babies or toddlers, so this is a refreshing change!
Awe! Thank you so much! You just made my day :)