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  • January Rose

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    Yah, you updated! Smile I had to re-read the last chapter since I was a little lost. But as soon as I did, I was like "Oh yah, this story!" and I knew exactly what had happened.

    Loved the chapter, especially Alice and Alex with their arguing. I thought it I was kind-of cute. Cute

    I noticed this:
    "It's ok Eric, I'm leaving now." O wouldn't sit here and take this kind of abuse any longer. I wasn't in the mood for having it out with him tonight, thanks very much..
    I think you meant to put an "I" instead of an "O".

    I loved the last line of the chapter, it made me laugh. Loved it.

    Please update soon because I really enjoy reading this story and I'm looking forward to reading what's next.
    July 3rd, 2013 at 03:29am
  • January Rose

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    Yah, you updated! Smile I had to re-read the last chapter since I was a little lost. But as soon as I did, I was like "Oh yah, this story!" and I knew exactly what had happened.

    Loved the chapter, especially Alice and Alex with their arguing. I thought it I was kind-of cute. Cute

    I noticed this:
    "It's ok Eric, I'm leaving now." O wouldn't sit here and take this kind of abuse any longer. I wasn't in the mood for having it out with him tonight, thanks very much..
    I think you meant to put an "I" instead of an "O".

    I loved the last line of the chapter, it made me laugh. Loved it.

    Please update soon because I really enjoy reading this story and I'm looking forward to reading what's next.
    July 3rd, 2013 at 03:28am
  • BlueEyedAngel2

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    I only just stumbled on to your story I really enjoy it. I find it.. Refreshing to see you don't feel the need to use foul language and if you do you astric it out. Anyway awesome job. Keep up the good work and write again soon
    June 30th, 2013 at 05:15am
  • January Rose

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    I really like it so far! I like how you switch the POV in the last chapter, adding more suspense.
    Update soon! Smile
    May 5th, 2013 at 01:08am
  • chocolatemushroom

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    @ loveupsidedown
    Thanks so much :D
    April 24th, 2013 at 01:20am
  • loveupsidedown

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    This seems like its going to be really good. Keep it up. :-)
    Update when you can.
    April 23rd, 2013 at 11:56pm
  • chocolatemushroom

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    @ TeaganMalis
    Thanks so much for reading :D Speak Now, lie the Taylor Swift song...Yup, I'll check it out :)
    April 23rd, 2013 at 10:13pm
  • TeaganMalis

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    Okay, obviously, since you've only gotten the first chapter, I can't tell you much about what I think of the plot. But I CAN tell you that I think your writing style is efficient, easy-going, and easily-relatable-to. It's light and funny, and you tell the story very well. I like Alice's perspective; it's refreshing.
    I can't wait to read Chapter Two, then.
    Do you mind reading MY story? It's called Speak Now.
    xoxo, Teagan
    April 23rd, 2013 at 09:43pm