Willa - Comments

  • losing control.

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    I'm here as a judge for the First A7X Contest.

    I appreciated that this story was cute and sweet -- it was quite the contrast to most of the other stories that I've read for this contest. Though it did seem a bit odd, almost a bit stalkerish actually, for him to just be watching a random girl, I like that he just wanted to introduce himself because he was so mesmerized by her.

    I liked that he was focusing on different parts of her and you could tell that he was really interested, but I would have liked to see a bit more description related to things other than her clothes or her eyes. I want to know more about the setting and other little details that will capture my attention and make me feel like I'm there too. I also wasn't entirely sure where Zacky fit into all of this. There was the phone call from the band member, but this could have just as easily been original fiction and I wouldn't have known the difference.

    Thanks for entering!
    August 3rd, 2017 at 09:10am
  • Elephant PJs

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    Okay, triple post. Sorry.
    December 6th, 2013 at 06:56am
  • Elephant PJs

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    Double post sorry.
    December 6th, 2013 at 06:55am
  • Elephant PJs

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    Your summary is short and sweet - setting me up for no doubt a very cute little story.

    The fact that this was in Zacky's perspective really surprised me - in a good way. I could see how in love he was already, and you didn't even have to spell it out. The way you describe Willa and her movements was enough to ascertain that. I think it was really cute how desperate Zacky was for her to look at him, and talk to him. I can just see all these things running through his head, and on the outside his face is probably just completely emotionless. The ending was also very sweet.

    This was probably too cutesy for my taste, but I can appreciate it nonetheless.

    Good luck in the contest!
    December 6th, 2013 at 06:53am
  • Asmodeus;

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    Okay I love this one! When I read it I was like "Yess Zacky Vengeance" I just wish it was longer I loved the detail, I was so giddy and giggling like a school girl while reading this, that says something.
    September 30th, 2013 at 03:20am
  • Drop_Dead_Gorgeous

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    Aw, This was like so cute and sweet. I love that you put lots of details and description in it like all of your writing and that what makes you unique, I love all your stories and this one is just amazing. It felt like it was so real like I cant even describe it. Too real to be true, It felt like I was floating on clouds.
    Amazing story one of my personal favorites.
    September 28th, 2013 at 09:01pm
  • Brain Dead Bipolar

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    This was so innocent and sweet. Definitely not what you usually see or think of when you think of any story that has to do with A7X. I've always imagined Zacky as having a softer side and being the soft-spoken, sweet, well-mannered kind of guy and this captured that side of him very well. You were very descriptive and I was able to see everything as he saw it and even feel that confusion and captivation he was feeling. Good job!!
    September 16th, 2013 at 07:09pm
  • Miss.J.isamonster

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    First of all, I loved the amount of description you put into this! That what gets me, the way every detail is described, you painted a beautiful image for me. The silence they shared was lovely, his obvious affection towards her was sweet, there was nothing about this story that I didn't like. The best part of it all, in my honest opinion, was the few words she said to him in the end. Those few words were short and sweet! They were the perfect ending to a lovely story. The fact that she carried herself in a mysterious awe and he in an entranced glow was just amazing to me. I loved it.
    July 18th, 2013 at 08:50am
  • Jefferson Starships

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    This was a very sweet story... Just beautiful hearing all those thoughts go through a boy's head about some lovely girl. ZACKY WAS SUCH A SAP! The girl seems so wonderful to be honest, I'd probably fall in love with her too. I absolutely enjoyed the slight air of mystery around Willa. Good job, really!
    July 8th, 2013 at 10:13pm
  • LoveForGiraffes

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    Thank you so much for entering my contest, I really enjoyed reading your story. I for one love Zacky Vengeance, and I love how you made him a very normal character instead of his usual badass hardass self that others like to write him as :p. I would absolutely love it if you expanded this and made it into a series (hint hint) but if not that's fine too, this is so good on it's own as well. <3 I'll be posting the winners to the contest very soon
    June 9th, 2013 at 12:09am
  • psychotic secrets;

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    I really liked this. It was a good little story to read.
    June 2nd, 2013 at 05:47pm
  • KVD213

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    Short and sweet, nice one shot. Makes you wonder more about Willa.
    May 26th, 2013 at 01:40am
  • CrimsonSlave

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    That was the most detailed oneshot I have read without being bored. It was absolutely amazing and the feelings he had for Willa and how she seemed to his eyes...just ugh...turning it to a full length story would be a big hit amongst the Avenged Sevenfold fans. Did I forget to say that the layout is amazing and the banner as well? Well, there...I said it. Overall, I fucking loved this. I want more so write more please. <3333
    May 1st, 2013 at 06:14pm
  • AJ9

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    Wow! You have to lengthen this! This is seriously too good to just stop there. Please say you'll add more to this? Very Happy
    April 28th, 2013 at 01:03am
  • littlewanderlust

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    Loved it, but wish I could hear more..she intrigued me
    April 25th, 2013 at 11:02am