I quite liked this this story a lot. It was rather clever and a unique addition to the Wonderland fandom. I loved how you wrote it like a historical essay and treated it all as fact, including dates and house names. I really enjoyed the formal terms you used like autocratic and totalitarian as well to add to the feel of this being a legitimate scholarly piece.
The word betrothed is used throughout the story in reference to, I believe, decapitation and I think you were looking for a different word. Betroth means like an engagement. If you're betrothed to someone, you've agreed to marry them. I definitely don't think you meant that the Queen of White entered into a marriage agreement with her second cousin.
…rising to what it's considered the second part of the Red Ages.
I do believe it's in this sentence should just be is.
I really liked how different this story was and the way in which you wrote it really enhanced the feeling of it being factual. I also liked that as formal as it was, there was a distinct oddity to it that made it very Wonderlandian. It was very amusing to read and the history of the monarchy was described very well.
The word betrothed is used throughout the story in reference to, I believe, decapitation and I think you were looking for a different word. Betroth means like an engagement. If you're betrothed to someone, you've agreed to marry them. I definitely don't think you meant that the Queen of White entered into a marriage agreement with her second cousin.
…rising to what it's considered the second part of the Red Ages.
I do believe it's in this sentence should just be is.
I really liked how different this story was and the way in which you wrote it really enhanced the feeling of it being factual. I also liked that as formal as it was, there was a distinct oddity to it that made it very Wonderlandian. It was very amusing to read and the history of the monarchy was described very well.