Sorry that it's taken so long for me to get around to commenting on entries! -_- I enjoyed that you wrote this in 'you' second person. All the stories I've seen on Mibba are always in first or third person, so this was different to read. I liked the fact that it was a simple, sad story and I liked how you used the song with writing this. You shouldn't say that it was bad because I honestly don't think it was. I have seen worse and this wouldn't fit in that category in the least. I actually felt some sadness twinge in my heart towards the ending--which I really liked a lot by the way! I think this was very well written and I enjoyed reading it.
I enjoyed that you wrote this in 'you' second person. All the stories I've seen on Mibba are always in first or third person, so this was different to read. I liked the fact that it was a simple, sad story and I liked how you used the song with writing this. You shouldn't say that it was bad because I honestly don't think it was. I have seen worse and this wouldn't fit in that category in the least. I actually felt some sadness twinge in my heart towards the ending--which I really liked a lot by the way! I think this was very well written and I enjoyed reading it.