Thanks so much for the wonderful review of my story, you're really amazing!
May 9th, 2013 at 10:19pm
This is for my recommendation blog. I will first review your story and then (before the end of the month) make the blog with the recommendations.
I normally do reviews in a structured manner (layout, title, summary, content, grammar, overall); this is how I will do this what I'll do for this review.
Layout
I like the simplicity of your layout. It's simple, readable, and not distracting. I am not so fond of the banner, actually it's just the sharp contrast that the image of Archer (it is him, right?) has with the rest of the banner; the rest of it, looks great to me.
Summary
I liked the wording in the summary but not the use of several ellipsis to convey mystery and fantasy behind the words. I think it would look amazing without the breaking of it into different paragraphs and separated with ellipsis. The way you have it set up breaks the flow of the narration, which, ignoring the ellipsis and the paragraphs divided by semicolons, is great and it hooks the reader up.
Title
Both the title and subtitle are interesting. The sole word, Reset, gives enough information about the story but it does not give the plot away.
Content
I really like the introduction of characters and how everything occurred; it gives a backstory to everything and how this will soon be forgotten as Archer decided to reset time. I think it's frightening to be in his place, being able to change the outcome of things but unable to remember your previous steps; he'll be walking in pitch darkness.
I also like how you portrayed grief in the story. Archer is obviously still in the denial stage of loss; he can't believe it so he won't allow it.
I really like your plot-line; time is a funny subject and my favorite thing to write about when I write in Spanish, so this spoke to me on that level.
I'm interested on how you will continue to develop the story and the characters and you move towards the (re)telling of the events; Archer has lived them but does not remember; we as the readers know the possible ending, but not how it occurred the first time, so we're no help to him and are in the same circumstance, in the same pitch-darkness.
Grammar
I saw some comma-splices here and there but nothing that's too distracting. Also noticed some mistakes when writing dialogue and tags accompanying the dialogue (like capitalizing the tag following the dialogue when it shouldn't be capitalized), but nothing else outside from that.
Overall
I think your story has a lot of potential. It's interesting; I love the fantasy touch you have on it (I love mythology, so this interests me a lot). You have a great backstory so far that can build up to incredible characterization. I enjoyed reading.
