August 6th, 2013 at 07:11pm
This was entirely too beautiful that I'm actually stumbling trying to put words together for you. It made me feel sad and bittersweet all at the same time.
It was realistic and I know that everybody can relate to this. I think everybody should read this and fall in love with it, because you wrote what I have thought at some point and what some other people have. Seriously, this was perfect and poetic. I love how you wrote this and the style you used. It really hit me straight in the heart. Good job with this story. It was amazing. :)
I really like how much emotion is in the piece, without you describing it or feeling like it was forced through the words. It was also incredibly realistic, and I know lots of people would be able to relate to it.
The line at the very beginning, and then the one that's just a slight variation of it at the end were my favorite. They really struck a cord with me, but the entire story was just as amazing.
Good job