May 30th, 2017 at 06:54am
I absolutely love the Phantom of the Opera, and with your summary and the layout, I think you've really captured the essence of Christine.
I think you did a really great job of conveying the sort of torn infatuation Christine has with the Phantom. Even though I know how the story goes, you really played on what could've very easily been. There was such an allure about the Phantom, and your descriptions describe it perfectly. Christine is flawed in that way only humans are, and I really like that. You've given the characters a bit of your own spin, but keep them so familiar too. I absolutely love it. You make me hate Christine, but understand and support her too.
This was such an interesting piece, and a real twist on the original story. You should be very proud of this.
Good luck in the contest!
I'm not at all familiar with Phantom of the Opera, but even so I enjoyed this story. You could really feel how Christine was struggling with how she felt about the Phantom. I feel like that shows a realness of the character to have those flaws and really struggle with them. It's very relatable even though the things in this story aren't really the types of things that would happen to a 'normal' person. It made me feel like I could possibly be in Christine's position even though I know I never would.
I really enjoyed your descriptions throughout this piece. They added just the right amount of detail without being overwhelming to read and gave a lot of insight to Christine's emotions. Even though it was mostly focused on Christine, you also showed some bits of how the Phantom was feeling and it really helped round everything out.
Overall, I thought this was well-written and interesting to read. Thanks for entering!