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  • nearly witches.

    nearly witches. (15250)

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    Hello! I'm here taking over the judging of the 'The Unpopular Fandoms' contest! Cute

    Layout / Summary

    I like the layout. The only bit that I'm iffy about is the plain background -- the colour doesn't seem to fit in entirely. Your summary is short, and leaves a lot to the imagination. Had I stumbled across this on the main story page, I'd probably have kept reading because I'm interested from the get-go.

    Content

    What I like about your first line is that it throws the reader right into the action. It kind of seems as if there should be a part we've read before which, personally, led me to become more invested in the rest of the paragraph. You've got this lovely description that follows as well. I've read loads of stories about one-night-stands on Mibba, but never one that deals instantly with the aftermath. I think it's a super-interesting concept because it's always going to be weird, waking up beside somebody you only met the night before. I like that Lilly has this moment of realisation when she's looking at him that he's pretty attractive, and I like Mikky's insistence on her staying for breakfast. It went from being a rather awkward encounter to being a really cute one, and I love that the most about this piece. It seems effortless, the interaction between them, and that's something that'll say a lot about the future relationship I imagine the two characters will have in the aftermath of this little piece.

    Concrit

    I don't think I spotted anything, to be honest.

    Overall

    This is such a lovely, light piece and the way that you wrote it just made it all the more better. I loved reading this piece. Good job!
    January 13th, 2018 at 09:01pm
  • WingDing Gaster

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    This is absolutely beautiful. I love it so much.
    April 8th, 2014 at 09:50pm
  • archipelago.

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    I'm so ridiculously happy right now, and so glad I browsed your story list.
    You're right, I'm also pretty sure this is the only Mikky Ekko fic on mibba, but that's fine because it's such a fantastic piece. Truly. You gave reason to some of the imagery in the video for 'Stay'. Yet still made this unique and created a backstory.

    I especially love how John/Mikky and Lilly seemed equally awkward, yet comfortable with each other. It made it all the more realistic. I have a fuzzy feeling inside now :)
    September 4th, 2013 at 01:01am
  • Anchor and Hope.

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    I really did love this.
    It was wonderfully written and so sweet.
    June 27th, 2013 at 06:12am