Firstly, let me say I am a sucker for well designed layouts. It's like a well designed book cover - it either repels or attracts you to the story. Let's face it, we all judge books by their covers (at least subconsciously). Your layout is well designed and pleasing to the eye. Try removing the Center align though, it's actually unconductive to reading. The Romeo and Juliet plot is an age old story line that has well and truly been tested, but I do believe that this story has the potential to bring something new to this cliché. I like that you use short sentences, it makes it all feel very to the point, but I feel that sometimes you use it in places that is meant to have a bit more description, or needs to be worded just slightly differently. For this reason, a little bit of editing is needed - in both the story itself, the writing and the summary in order to tighten things up a little. But that's something that's easily dealt with. My honest opinion is that a little work will take this story far, because it has the potential to be something great.
February 23rd, 2016 at 12:39pm