Cough - Comments

Well, obviously it isn't a poem! You just have a creative way of setting up a drabble. There's prose in it, people! But the imagery is beautiful and there's a breath of mystery that I couldn't ignore. Good job. I really liked it.

The imagery in this really is quite breathtaking. I got the sense of being surrounded by flowers myself when I was reading, which was quite bizarre. I'm not too sure what this is about, but I actually quite like it that way. The air of mystery about this piece is great, especially since it leaves the reader to think about what happened. I like pieces that make me think.

Without echoing other comments, I think this is very poetic. Not in the sense that it should be a poem (most of the drabbles I read have a vague sense of characterisation in them anyway), but in the sense that the language used is () flowery and elegant. I think it works really well within this piece. I particularly love the little rhymes you've included (posies and roses was my particular favourite) because they make this flow so smoothly.

I really liked the concept of this. Good work!

I don't really like how people are debating in their comments whether or not this story is a poem or story. I feel as though, to the writer if it reads as a story, it's a story, if it also happens to read as a poem to other readers, it's still a story. It is the writer's own works, therefore I feel just let the writer tell you what it is. [/endrant]

So I really like this picture, it's something I hadn't seen before and I thought it was very different. This reminds me very much of bulimia, it just came to mind while I was reading and as the story came to an end I just felt like that was the only thing it could have been about to me. I know that everyone interprets things in their own way, and I realize that may not have been what you were writing about at all, so i'm sorry if this association offends you in any way or something like that.
This was beautifully written, nonetheless. The sentence structure and your word choice just helped the piece flow so well. This was eye-opening to me, as to see so many different ways people can write their own stories. I'm happy I found it.

Here from comment swap.

To be honest, I'm not sure what to think of this. It's almost too short to know if I like it or not...

Now don't get me wrong, you've written it well, it's just I prefer thing with a plot and characters. Although I did like the way this one just flowed effortlessly, but then again I dislike it too.

Anywho, I think you did write it well, so marks for that, and the layout is nice too.

I... I'm not sure if I like this or if I dislike this. It's really well written, it's super different, and I absolutely love that. I love how you use flowers that most people wouldn't think to use. I also love how the imagery is so intense that you can feel what she feels and you can imagine what the flower field must've looked like and all.

However... To me, the sentences in the second paragraph are a bit too long. In my mind I read it quickly and I have to reread it again in order to slow it down. The whole "down down down" part is interesting, but I'm not too sure if it's in a good way or not.

I'm confused about this. I like it, but I also dislike it. It's different, really different. But the pros outweigh the cons... So I'm probably in favor of it, I'm just a little wary after the first read. Maybe if I read it over and over I'll get it. But yeah. It's... It's very good. Different. I'm just repeating myself.

I read the comments previously and have to disagree with the ones claiming it needs to go into the poem section. Stories DON'T have to have a plot, or a set character for it to be an actual story.

The way you wrote this drabble is amazing by the way, I loved the flow of it all. I thought it was well done and inspirational :) Good job

*Comment Swap*
First off, I love the imagery you show in this writing. However, I feel like it is more of a poem than a story. I think you should add this as poetry instead of a story. This is really great work though! The layout matches perfectly with the story as well, which is awesome! I liked it! There isn't anything I would change except maybe making this a poem instead!

Hi! This is for comment swap! First, I want to saw that I'm really confused. Is this a story? or a poem? Because I believe this should have been submitted into the category of poems. So far, there is no plot, and no characters (that I know of). Yes, you have very very VERY good imagery and imagination but this doesn't apply to a story. If this was a story, this chapter should have been the summary and you could of expanded into your chapters. The layout is really pretty, by the way. The picture at the top really suits what you wrote! Overall, this was really nice to read, but also very confusing. Thanks for reading my comment! Bye :)

Wow, this is really amazing...

Shit Brooke this was literally magical. I like how... poetic it was. This was wonderful.

Perfect imagery.

This is weird and I like it.