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  • Normanreedus

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    @ Elle Gardner
    The advice is much appreciated! Thank you!
    July 21st, 2013 at 02:49am
  • Elle Gardner

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    Great story, love the threesome. I think you got Sean's "voice" down very well.

    A little constructive if you don't mind. Some formatting would make it an easier read. Also, I don't think you need the "Y/N". Make it all first person, and our dirty minds will put ourselves right in the middle of it.

    I hope I didn't offend with my comment, I very much enjoyed this story.
    July 8th, 2013 at 01:52pm
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