Don't You Think? - Comments

This is very interesting. I love how it's making me think and that i had to read it over several times and still my brain is trying to figure it all out. I've never read anything like this before. I'm left with all kinds of questions about it but I'm just going to go on my way and think about it. :)

I'm afraid I have to say I'm one of those people that doesn't understand what I just read. To me, it's a black of text, with words that have meanings and a vague meaning behind every sentence-- but the meaning of this all banded together leaves me completely lost.

It's like you were writing a poem, took out all the metaphorical pieces, and glued them together into this paragraph.

I'd like to say I'm sure there's something profoundly deep hidden between the lines-- but I really can't be sure. Maybe you were typing to hear yourself type.

The grammar is beautiful, and you're done everything correctly. I can tell you're a decent writer.

I think the only real criticism I have would be that you entered a piece into comment swap, when you clearly don't care whether or not the people who read it understand.

But since that's not a real criticism of the material itself, I'm just going to put down a few praises here and there. The pacing of this reminds me a lot of the opening song to "Music Man". Especially at the end with the 'doesn't matter's.

I really don't know what else I can say, because I really don't know what I just read. You have a pretty layout and the text is easy to view.

Edit: I'm very sorry, I don't know how this managed to post a billion times like that. And I know it must be so frustrating to see the alerts for multiple comments only to find that what I've said repeated itself. It's quite embarrassing. I don't know how it happened. </3

I'm afraid I have to say I'm one of those people that doesn't understand what I just read. To me, it's a black of text, with words that have meanings and a vague meaning behind every sentence-- but the meaning of this all banded together leaves me completely lost.

It's like you were writing a poem, took out all the metaphorical pieces, and glued them together into this paragraph.

I'd like to say I'm sure there's something profoundly deep hidden between the lines-- but I really can't be sure. Maybe you were typing to hear yourself type.

The grammar is beautiful, and you're done everything correctly. I can tell you're a decent writer.

I think the only real criticism I have would be that you entered a piece into comment swap, when you clearly don't care whether or not the people who read it understand.

But since that's not a real criticism of the material itself, I'm just going to put down a few praises here and there. The pacing of this reminds me a lot of the opening song to "Music Man". Especially at the end with the 'doesn't matter's.

I really don't know what else I can say, because I really don't know what I just read. You have a pretty layout and the text is easy to view.

I'm afraid I have to say I'm one of those people that doesn't understand what I just read. To me, it's a black of text, with words that have meanings and a vague meaning behind every sentence-- but the meaning of this all banded together leaves me completely lost.

It's like you were writing a poem, took out all the metaphorical pieces, and glued them together into this paragraph.

I'd like to say I'm sure there's something profoundly deep hidden between the lines-- but I really can't be sure. Maybe you were typing to hear yourself type.

The grammar is beautiful, and you're done everything correctly. I can tell you're a decent writer.

I think the only real criticism I have would be that you entered a piece into comment swap, when you clearly don't care whether or not the people who read it understand.

But since that's not a real criticism of the material itself, I'm just going to put down a few praises here and there. The pacing of this reminds me a lot of the opening song to "Music Man". Especially at the end with the 'doesn't matter's.

I really don't know what else I can say, because I really don't know what I just read. You have a pretty layout and the text is easy to view.

I'm afraid I have to say I'm one of those people that doesn't understand what I just read. To me, it's a black of text, with words that have meanings and a vague meaning behind every sentence-- but the meaning of this all banded together leaves me completely lost.

It's like you were writing a poem, took out all the metaphorical pieces, and glued them together into this paragraph.

I'd like to say I'm sure there's something profoundly deep hidden between the lines-- but I really can't be sure. Maybe you were typing to hear yourself type.

The grammar is beautiful, and you're done everything correctly. I can tell you're a decent writer.

I think the only real criticism I have would be that you entered a piece into comment swap, when you clearly don't care whether or not the people who read it understand.

But since that's not a real criticism of the material itself, I'm just going to put down a few praises here and there. The pacing of this reminds me a lot of the opening song to "Music Man". Especially at the end with the 'doesn't matter's.

I really don't know what else I can say, because I really don't know what I just read. You have a pretty layout and the text is easy to view.

I'm afraid I have to say I'm one of those people that doesn't understand what I just read. To me, it's a black of text, with words that have meanings and a vague meaning behind every sentence-- but the meaning of this all banded together leaves me completely lost.

It's like you were writing a poem, took out all the metaphorical pieces, and glued them together into this paragraph.

I'd like to say I'm sure there's something profoundly deep hidden between the lines-- but I really can't be sure. Maybe you were typing to hear yourself type.

The grammar is beautiful, and you're done everything correctly. I can tell you're a decent writer.

I think the only real criticism I have would be that you entered a piece into comment swap, when you clearly don't care whether or not the people who read it understand.

But since that's not a real criticism of the material itself, I'm just going to put down a few praises here and there. The pacing of this reminds me a lot of the opening song to "Music Man". Especially at the end with the 'doesn't matter's.

I really don't know what else I can say, because I really don't know what I just read. You have a pretty layout and the text is easy to view.

I'm afraid I have to say I'm one of those people that doesn't understand what I just read. To me, it's a black of text, with words that have meanings and a vague meaning behind every sentence-- but the meaning of this all banded together leaves me completely lost.

It's like you were writing a poem, took out all the metaphorical pieces, and glued them together into this paragraph.

I'd like to say I'm sure there's something profoundly deep hidden between the lines-- but I really can't be sure. Maybe you were typing to hear yourself type.

The grammar is beautiful, and you're done everything correctly. I can tell you're a decent writer.

I think the only real criticism I have would be that you entered a piece into comment swap, when you clearly don't care whether or not the people who read it understand.

But since that's not a real criticism of the material itself, I'm just going to put down a few praises here and there. The pacing of this reminds me a lot of the opening song to "Music Man". Especially at the end with the 'doesn't matter's.

I really don't know what else I can say, because I really don't know what I just read. You have a pretty layout and the text is easy to view.

this reads like organized chaos, but oh my god, it works somehow. i'll admit, though, i'm a wee bit confused. to me, it's kind of like an i want him but i don't want him but oh my god! i do but i really don't.../lolita sort of drabble. but nonetheless, it was lovely. i do have a weakness for such stories; it's also really refreshing to see it from the girl's pov, rather than the man's, so we're really able to see what she's thinking. i wish it was a story -- rather than a drabble -- so you could reiterate a little further as to what's going on. anyways, i really enjoyed this. well done. (:

It reads in an odd what that just fits. I don't know. It's like an organized chaos of thoughts. I can't fully comprehend it, but when I read through it, I'm seeing a guy and possible jailbait. I feel kind of shallow that that's all I see, like I'm missing the deeper meaning. D: I'm just imagining it's something super obscure and clever. Maybe you'll give a hint one day?

What? I'm so confused right now. So is she being hit on or hitting on someone who has a girlfriend but wait I feel really dumb right now. I mean you know I love your writing and all but I don't get it. I'm going to walk away and feel dumb now.

This is probably one of the best/most intriguing things I've read in ages. I love how it makes the reader think, really think, and want to read it over and over again to find some other meaning to it. The way this has been written, its repetitive nature, and the shortness of it is all so wonderful and alluring. My, this really is something special.

Yes, you are right, my mistake. *I'm gonna hide in a corner*

The chapter itself was even more amazing. I'm not sure what to say other than I enjoyed this, that's why I rec this. You deserve more comments without a doubt for this one.

This was very interesting, to say the least. I honestly had to read it a few times outloud because I was reading it a little too fast, and just couldn't get what I was reading. But anyway, I really enjoyed reading this. It was, what's the word, different than what I am used to reading, but I like that about this, and about your writing style. It was wonderful

That was amazing. I love that one line, dark but dull? and I love.. everything about it, basically. It was.. amazing. It contrasted with the lightness of the layout with it's dark tone and how you kept saying it didn't matter, but brought it up again. Absolutely perfect.

That was amazing. You said not to say this is a poem and I know it isn't but I can say that I like this poetic-like drabble, can't I?

if you can't stand the heat then get out of the fire,
If only that was so easy. It's mostly all in your head, if you could just say no and move on that would have been great. And you can, no one stops you but even though you want to, yet you don't.

you might get what you desire boy.
Might is the key word. You are not sure if you'll get what you deserve, so you have to take the risk. Leave what burns you behind and looking for that might or staying where you are and getting burned.

love is strange sometimes it makes you crazy...
And those are the times which me have to be afraid of.

it can burn or break you.
As well as kill you at it's worst fate.

That was short but absolutely amazing. It was deep thought-out and I liked that.

By the way, thanks for this drabble's comment virginity.
I am honestly in love with it.

~Marian.