I'll Drink to That - Comments

This was so good. When I'm able to feel the character's emotions the writer's stature is definitely verified.
Thank you so much for entering my contest and giving me the opportunity to see what you're made of.
I will definitely be keeping an eye on you're stories!

Winners are posted.

@ what is wrc
Haha I will, thanks again :)

@ Snow.White.Queen.
Ohh, it looked set up like it was a story. If it turns into one, let me know! I'll definitely read it.

@ what is wrc
This is actually only a two shot, so it's finished. But thinking about it, I might just turn this into a story. Thanks for your comment!

I liked the way this story is going. I don't know much about the band, so I may not get the little insiders details when it comes to that. I'm getting excited as I got to the end of chapter two. Something tells me that Amanda and Jordan will become a little more then chums. ;D

The header/picture is just adorable! I'm going to subscribe and wait for more!

hello, pleasure as always to be honored to read your story. i only go as far as the first chapter as to be fair with all my critiques.

In the first paragraph of the story, it should be rock star not Rockstar. "Oli and her..." instead of "her and Oli...." which occurred in a few other spots as well.

oli's accent is obviously british, which doesn't by chance mean that it is needed to be added into writing because just by saying that he said it in a thick british accent shows how he speaks without having to add the 'honeh's or what not.

but anyways, that was a great story so far and i hope you continue it and flourish as a writer with the criticism i delivered - hope i didn't come across as harsh or what not.

have a lovely day though.

literally sat and read the chapters like this
"holy shit!" "oh my god" "no!" "woah" "oh my god" "she didn't" "holy shit"

I love how you set up the drama of the first chapter and how you wrote the dialogue. It really flowed and helped me imagine the fight in my head. I also liked how you called attention to the engagement ring and how Amanda felt about what should be a happy thing. I also like the character dynamic about her best friend being the sister of the guy who just cheated on her. I'm excited to see how that plot element develops further.
Keep up the good work, can't wait for more!

i rly like it. i'd like to read more of this story ;>