Firstly, layout is great, not hard to read the words, it also looks quite elegant withthe picture and all. We did not unfortunatley enjoy your summary, it was choppy and seemed incomplete. Your first chapter, it was good, gave the readers a nice perception of the character's to grasp, although beggining was a bit wishy washy. It switches from present to past tense without any real transition. We love the theme of your story and the plot, it'st just that the wording is a bit off. We also love how you name your titles. We love how your chapters are short and sweet, not too long, not too short, the right length. This is a great story, it just needs more work. "Don't loose hope, I really like it!" Says one. "It's not my kind of story, I wish you good luck though" Says two Three doesn't want to comment.
Firstly, layout is great, not hard to read the words, it also looks quite elegant withthe picture and all. We did not unfortunatley enjoy your summary, it was choppy and seemed incomplete. Your first chapter, it was good, gave the readers a nice perception of the character's to grasp, although beggining was a bit wishy washy. It switches from present to past tense without any real transition. We love the theme of your story and the plot, it'st just that the wording is a bit off. We also love how you name your titles. We love how your chapters are short and sweet, not too long, not too short, the right length. This is a great story, it just needs more work.
"Don't loose hope, I really like it!" Says one.
"It's not my kind of story, I wish you good luck though" Says two
Three doesn't want to comment.