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  • Maddi;

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    This reminded me a little too much of She's the Man (the movie with Amanda Bynes) for me to fully enjoyed. I do like how passionate Demitri is about soccer and you can tell that she really cares for the sport and wants her father's approval in that and all other things. I think it is very endearing, and it comes off as feeling very real.
    Other than the clichéd ness of the plot, I enjoyed reading this story and I like the characters that you created. I think you’re an excellent writer and I hope you keep on writing and perfecting your craft. Great job and good luck!
    August 16th, 2013 at 03:26am
  • BlueEyedAngel2

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    I probably will
    July 16th, 2013 at 12:25pm
  • AshyMandy

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    Lol yeah. Well the next 10-15 chapters are pretty good:) Can't wait to show you. I hope that you'll laugh and cry
    July 16th, 2013 at 06:14am
  • BlueEyedAngel2

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    No no that's not what I meant.. I mean it's something a guy.. Or a girl would say when caught cheating.. "I didn't plan for that to happen it just did" lol you know? But no I love it it just seemed funny to me
    July 15th, 2013 at 12:54pm
  • AshyMandy

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    i didnt cheat i just add a twist to the plot. I'm going to like this
    July 15th, 2013 at 08:53am
  • AshyMandy

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    @ BlueEyedAngel2
    i didnt cheat i just add a twist to the plot. I'm going to like this
    July 15th, 2013 at 08:53am
  • AshyMandy

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    @ BlueEyedAngel2
    i didnt cheat i just add a twist to the plot. I'm going to like this
    July 15th, 2013 at 08:53am
  • BlueEyedAngel2

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    Lol that sounds like a way of explaining why you cheated.. If that makes sense
    July 15th, 2013 at 04:50am
  • AshyMandy

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    I didn't plan for that to happen it just did

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    July 15th, 2013 at 01:27am
  • BlueEyedAngel2

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    A totally awesome chapter to end with for a bit that is can't wait for more!!!
    July 14th, 2013 at 10:21pm
  • BlueEyedAngel2

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    A totally awesome chapter to end with for a bit that is can't wait for more!!!
    July 14th, 2013 at 10:21pm
  • AshyMandy

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    Not crappy!! & shame on you for saying so it's great a bit short and so sweet but not crappy and you can tell anyone who says it is I said to take a hike..and don't come back you're an amazing author so don't let anyone make you feel otherwise. Trust me it's hard to build your confidence back up once you l let it fall I'd hate to seethat happen to you.
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    July 12th, 2013 at 04:26pm
  • AshyMandy

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    Thanks my number one fan :) I had this huge plan for the last two chapters and i fell short of what i wanted. When i finish the story which isn't for like another 40-80 chapters with a possible sequel i'm going to edit and rewrite it adding everything i missed in. as well as more describtion
    July 12th, 2013 at 04:24pm
  • BlueEyedAngel2

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    Not crappy!! & shame on you for saying so it's great a bit short and so sweet but not crappy and you can tell anyone who says it is I said to take a hike..and don't come back you're an amazing author so don't let anyone make you feel otherwise. Trust me it's hard to build your confidence back up once you l let it fall I'd hate to seethat happen to you.
    Ang
    July 12th, 2013 at 04:44am
  • BlueEyedAngel2

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    I'm still reading and really love it! Keep up the good work
    July 10th, 2013 at 10:08pm
  • BlueEyedAngel2

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    I'm still reading and really love it! Keep up the good work
    July 10th, 2013 at 08:24pm
  • Redstreet

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    Omg i love this!!! Please update soon?!?!?!
    July 7th, 2013 at 03:27am
  • BlueEyedAngel2

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    So I have two Things to say...
    1.) Arrrrrggggghhhh cliffhanger much!!!!???? I hate cliffhangers.. Being afraid of heights and all...lol
    2.) Totally thought I subscribed last time I found your story but somehow it didn't take.. Grrr anyway am subscribed now. I totally love it you're doing great more chapters pretty please!!!???
    July 6th, 2013 at 01:34pm
  • BlueEyedAngel2

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    So I have two Things to say...
    1.) Arrrrrggggghhhh cliffhanger much!!!!???? I hate cliffhangers.. Being afraid of heights and all...lol
    2.) Totally thought I subscribed last time I found your story but somehow it didn't take.. Grrr anyway am subscribed now. I totally love it you're doing great more chapters pretty please!!!???
    July 6th, 2013 at 01:34pm
  • Olivia_Gates

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    I love the idea you have for the story of girls on the footballs team. It's original and all inspiring. You write fantastically, but watch out for spelling errors when typing (it happens to the best of us). Also, create a layout to draw in your readers and capture their attention, otherwise, great story and keep on writing!
    June 7th, 2013 at 12:31am