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  • girlygirl.m

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    Omg i love this story!!! Please come back and update it!!!
    September 27th, 2015 at 09:43am
  • Amysteriousglint

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    @aligned I'm sorry, I havent been on the computer a lot lately. I almost forgot about all my original stories because I started to write fanfictions a butt load. But I shall come back. Give me a day and Ill upload another chapter for this story. :) Promise.
    December 14th, 2013 at 09:20pm
  • phkoenix

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    Please don't stop writing. Come back. <\3 I keep checking everyday incase you post another chapter. /.\
    November 28th, 2013 at 03:33am
  • IceDeath.

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    Love the new chapter, I feel like this is a little late...hehe...Anyways, please, please, please update soon!! :)
    November 6th, 2013 at 03:51am
  • Verona Viridian

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    Hello there!

    Your story is quite appealing, and it really does pull the readers in. I'm sure you knew that already, as the past few comments have said as much! Very Happy

    I just needed to tell you that I have only read the first chapter so far, and did notice some stuff that didn't quite add up. They aren't major errors, but minor ones that people do tend to notice. For instance, you kept referring to 'the blonde girl', but you referred to her as 'Rosa' once, even before she was introduced. Could you please fix that? Smile

    I was looking at the characters, and noticed that Gwen's sister, Rory, is older than her. I remembered that Gwen referred to 'enrolling her younger sisters' into the school. . . The facts don't really match up here either. . .

    “Excuse me?’ A voice suddenly said. Gwen jumpedJumping Gwen , and then turned around. quickly.
    It would also be beneficial if you could reword the above sentence, as it is quite confusing!

    Also, you seem to mix up the words 'to' and 'too' a lot! Um . . . hope you do edit soon enough as some readers to tune off if they see too many errors. Your story is truly unique, and I really am in love with it. Thus, I wouldn't want that to happen! Smile

    Other than that, I just wanted to tell you that I subscribed to your story about 2 weeks ago, and didn't get the time to read it. Now that I've read it, I think I like where this is going. I know that isn't saying much, since I've only read one chapter so far. To have that influence on a reader is something any writer wishes to have!

    Hope you do keep on writing . . .

    ~ Verona :)
    September 12th, 2013 at 05:28am
  • IceDeath.

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    O.o umm, Wow? Yea, that about sums it up. Since this story is so damn good, I want to make a suggestion, and that is: You should update this at least twice a day.....I would read this all the time. I can't wait to read more!!! Update soon!!
    September 9th, 2013 at 05:19am
  • Erin.Grace.

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    ahhh holy mother of ballz!! epic fucking update! and holy hell though!! I cant believe dan was going to punch her in front of everyone, even if thats how their relationship works!!! I love how he wrote tht off as sa "healthy relationship" in his eyes tht they beat each other up haha! bullshit! and fuck man! Fucking Neji stepped in to stop him!?!? Her sister has got to be PISSED! or at least a little suspicious! I would be! SO much tension!
    September 6th, 2013 at 02:40pm
  • anybodys

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    so excited to see where you take this story! loving it so far
    September 6th, 2013 at 01:53am
  • Erin.Grace.

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    about damn time! i was going fucking nuts! no one and i mean NO ONE has updated a story I'm subscribed to in like over a week! I swear! and I've been craving an update from this story in particular the past few days!! It's been forever!!!!! Hurry up and update as soon as you can! I go insane with out reading material and I love this story lol
    September 5th, 2013 at 06:21pm
  • Erin.Grace.

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    about damn time! i was going fucking nuts! no one and i mean NO ONE has updated a story I'm subscribed to in like over a week! I swear! and I've been craving an update from this story in particular the past few days!! It's been forever!!!!! Hurry up and update as soon as you can! I go insane with out reading material and I love this story lol
    September 5th, 2013 at 06:21pm
  • Unholy_Vengeance

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    Love this please continue :)
    August 22nd, 2013 at 09:45am
  • paigesharrow

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    Hurry hurry hurry <3 loving it!
    August 20th, 2013 at 03:21am
  • mgn.

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    love it ugh
    August 20th, 2013 at 02:32am
  • mgn.

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    @ Amysteriousglint
    that's what I thought! thank you (:
    August 18th, 2013 at 11:55pm
  • IWannaKnowHowItFeels

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    I falling in love with this story. Finally a good read on Mibba again. Update soon please!
    August 18th, 2013 at 10:43pm
  • Amysteriousglint

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    @alrightwell It's pronounced Neh-G
    I'm somewhat obsessed with Naruto, so yeah. Couldnt help myself. hahaha!
    August 18th, 2013 at 05:28am
  • mgn.

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    oh my god I laughed when the entire shower scene. also, how do you pronounce Neji?
    August 18th, 2013 at 05:12am
  • AyannaNana

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    I doth agree with Killing Romance. Seriously. This is the first time in a while I have actually been so engrossed in a story I write a comment lol :) keep up the good work d^-^b (<---- double thumbs up \^-^/
    August 17th, 2013 at 06:39pm
  • TeckMarie

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    I actually really like this story. It's new and fresh. Lovin' it! :)
    August 17th, 2013 at 07:14am
  • mgn.

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    you're writing is so detailed, but not overly detailed and that's great. I really am interested to see where this goes :)
    August 17th, 2013 at 12:19am