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  • spencer hastings.

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    PROLOGUE:

    I really love the way that you start this story with such vivid and different description. I like all the words that you stitch together to formulate such detailed descriptions. That you don't just use one to describe a location, you describe it wholly. And I really love the personification that you use to describe the moon and stars, like they are protecting the people. And I like the way that it switches so fast from peaceful to brutal and on the brink.

    ASPEN:

    Again, I think that the description is beautiful. The characters are very vivid and easy to imagine in the reader's head. Especially her father. You almost give off an aura of him just through your writing. And it is very clear that Aspen is definitely not a Mary Sue, but a very strong female character. And I love that. The names are definitely cool, too. And I can't wait to find out more about Dinte and what part he plays in this story. If there are more like him, if he is like the mascot or the sidekick.

    AUGUST:

    I like the maturity of the language that you use. I'm not used to seeing the word "delegation" in someone's writing on here. And you pull it off perfectly. And, again, I love the description of the situation. It is very imaginable and easy to place what is happening. The only thing that I wish is that there could be more information as to what kind of a person August is. But I'm sure that is going to come later, yeah? So I will be patient and wait for that.

    And now I definitely can't wait to read more, seeing as you left it at that cliffhanger. This is a very different kind of story, and I can't wait to read more and find out what happens and where the plot is going. Can't wait for an update. Keep up the awesome work!
    May 26th, 2014 at 06:57pm
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    SUPER INTRIGUING LOVE IT ♥
    September 28th, 2013 at 11:35pm
  • toobadsodead

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    @ SmugglinMarcy
    Thank you! I really didn't expect us to get any comments so early! The next chapter will by my co-author, so you'll get actually get Kennedy's perspective instead of Aspen ^-^ Thank you so much for the comment, and I'm so glad that you like the story :)
    July 26th, 2013 at 06:29pm
  • MuffinRice

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    This story is beautifully written and rich with details. I really enjoy reading it and look forward to another chapter. You are such a lovely writer. Keep up the amazing work!

    So excited to see where you take this. (:
    July 26th, 2013 at 06:24pm