July 8th, 2013 at 10:37pm
I like whole look of the layout. The colors all go together well and I love the colors you picked. The picture and background are also really nice.
I really like how you worked the back story into the first chapter. It definitely gets the reader's attention, especially the way you ended the first chapter. I also like the way you named the chapters and added when the chapter takes place under the title. I loved the difference in attitudes about the baby because I'm used to reading stories where its the male character that doesn't want a baby.
Your writing is simple but its good. There might be a few sentences you could rewrite just to make it flow. I didn't notice any big mistakes. Even though this is a Batman fanfic it isn't hard to follow if you aren't a fan so great job on that.
Overall you've got a really good start and I enjoyed reading this!
Thank you so much for that comment because simple wasn't the style I was going for, I'm normally a lot more detailed! But I hadn't noticed so thank you, I'm currently working on it!!