August 3rd, 2013 at 07:03pm
I really enjoyed this! I don't usually read stuff about vampires and the like, but this surprised me. It had a good balance of humour and thriller-ness which kept me interested. Your summary held a good amount of intrigue and represented the story very well.
I do enjoy reading your work; your style has a laidback, yet full of drama vibe which I love to read. I liked how you described things, but not overly so and had your own spin on a vampire's lifestyle. It's refreshing to see some original ideas!
Your characters are well thought out and really different to one another which I think makes the adventure all that more amusing. The personality clashes at the start between Ben and Nicole were wonderfully executed, and Michael seems like a total sweetheart!.
The fact that this wasn't just your ordinary vampire story filled with sex, gore and more sex is really appealing to many people, I think. You have a plot that could easily make this story into a series.
All in all, it was a great read! :)
Not a lot of people can pull off humour, but you have here and I think that's great. I could easily see this becoming a fully-fledged story, but it still works as a short story.
I'll be announcing the winners later on tonight, so good luck!