I am here to judge this entry for the Phoias Writing Contest.
The layout is simple yet beautiful. It gives the insight about the setting of the plot in a clear manner.
I can't believe this story doesn't have more recognition. Personally, I think it was written greatly. It had many scary parts that literally gave me chills. Throughout the whole chapter, tension was filled. The fear of clowns is very recognizable, and made this piece, very realistic. I liked the idea of having the main character be a child, who are used to these type of entertainers. Clowns can be both an inspiration for children, and their worst nightmare. You managed to use descriptive details in what Carolyn was observing and feeling, and not many writers can do. I loved the eerie feeling it gave, when Carolyn debates whether everything she experienced was a dream or not.
I liked the end, because it gave a more terrifying sensation that Carolyn was simply insane. The story didn't really portrayed the fear of clowns as I expected, rather than a somewhat horror story, relating a clown. I wish it would have ended in a way, that Carolyn would be scare to death to Jack or other clowns, and show details of such, instead of having the main character be described as greatly mad.
This was a unique little story, I think you did a great job exploring the phobia of clowns, they are quite scary! You write really well, everything flowed nicely :) great job dear
The layout is simple yet beautiful. It gives the insight about the setting of the plot in a clear manner.
I can't believe this story doesn't have more recognition. Personally, I think it was written greatly. It had many scary parts that literally gave me chills. Throughout the whole chapter, tension was filled. The fear of clowns is very recognizable, and made this piece, very realistic. I liked the idea of having the main character be a child, who are used to these type of entertainers. Clowns can be both an inspiration for children, and their worst nightmare. You managed to use descriptive details in what Carolyn was observing and feeling, and not many writers can do. I loved the eerie feeling it gave, when Carolyn debates whether everything she experienced was a dream or not.
I liked the end, because it gave a more terrifying sensation that Carolyn was simply insane. The story didn't really portrayed the fear of clowns as I expected, rather than a somewhat horror story, relating a clown. I wish it would have ended in a way, that Carolyn would be scare to death to Jack or other clowns, and show details of such, instead of having the main character be described as greatly mad.
Good Luck!
Christie