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  • Fandango

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    Before anyone else 'points it out', it is supposed to be "defiantly" - it contextually/grammatically does not make sense to say "definitely". Cheers.
    July 6th, 2013 at 09:13pm
  • capheus

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    I think this layout is really nice, I know it's hard to match pictures with grainy backgrounds but this one looks fine and I love how you worked with the title and subtitle, it just looks really nice.

    This whole story and how it was written remind of me of poetry. It was very poetic and extremely sad.

    I only saw one thing, as di-nex had said, defiantly should probably be definitely. and defiantly don’t think about him Just so you know/see it, if you don't care, that's cool too.
    Like I said though, this was extremely sad. There was so much uncertainty to this piece and the last two lines, I feel there's hope but it's very slim and there's so much that could come after that. There could be a happy ending or a sad one, I love how you did this.
    July 6th, 2013 at 06:04pm
  • maus.

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    I am in physical pain. Thank you, I needed that before I went to sleep.
    June 14th, 2013 at 09:38am
  • What...

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    You’ve probably just missed him for too long.

    You don't even wait, no letting me in easy it's just ALL PAIN ALL THE TIME WITH YOU Crazy Cry

    The apartment… the apartment fucking reeks, of cigarettes, of vomit, of sadness.

    That's the saddest thing because all those things together just smell like sadness and it's what sadness does to people and Cry

    YOU HURT ME, TRACY.

    you don’t know what you’re saying when his mother calls, because she shouldn’t sound like him but she does. She does.

    What. Please. Don't do this to me?

    She asks questions you can answer but don’t want to because it would might actually kill you. I would hurt too much to say, “I loved him but that wasn't enough,”

    That's the most ridiculous amount of pain right there, right now I just Cry Crazy cause it says so many things but it isn't much you just pack it in like bricks, I don't know how Cry

    You stare at the unmade bed (unmade plans?)

    Always you with the secksy time sadness Facepalm

    defiantly don’t think about him because thinking about him would mean Thinking About Him and the wounds he left so easily, the wounds that refuse to scar

    Because he's supposed to think about him, but he doesn't want to, like do you even know what you're saying I just... Like he wants to be okay so bad but he's not and he knows it but he just pretends and it still hurts oh lord Swoon

    because it sounds like the better days, and it sounds like you can’t let go but you have. You’re going to. You will eventually.

    AND THERE IT IS AGAIN, OKAY. Like the rest of your story is pitch black and then there's this little sunrise and then

    (But... but) You can still put “Love” and his name in the same sentence. It’s the only time it doesn’t feel like you have to explain yourself, because there is no explaining beyond that.

    THIS HAPPENS ARE YOU TRYING TO GIVE ME EMOTIONAL WHIPLASH Cheese

    CAUSE TEARS.

    Because still all you can think is, “You took me with you”

    And then that thing where you can feel it but I can't explain exactly what you're doing to me because too many feelings being assaulted ALL AT ONCE.

    (You’ll always wonder if he left his booking information open on your computer on purpose. If he was just being cruel. If maybe he really wanted you to follow him.)

    And then there's this maybe here that kills me because it's beautiful because they aren't done yet and they go on after I leave them and it makes me ache because it makes it real like who even are you and what do you do Cry
    June 14th, 2013 at 12:03am
  • vanduo

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    It's interesting and sensitive, but I think by "defiantly" you meant "definitely"
    June 13th, 2013 at 10:35pm