A Heart Worth Breaking - Comments

  • chelseycate

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    Your summary really drew me in, although I don't know who Matthew Tuck is. Haha. I really love the description of his eyes. The "Ice blue" description is actually how I picture one of my own characters so that made me happy! tehe
    Description is an essential part in stories, and I think for short stories it's even more important and I think you achieved that all very well! Everything flowed well and it all seemed very believable! The ending was good and everything came together well! Good job!
    July 7th, 2013 at 09:58pm
  • Katelyn23

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    I love how this story comes full circle! The opening paragraph is fantastic and I loved the description you used all though this but that first paragraph is just perfect . I love how you really didn't mention names and left a little bit of mystery about who "she" was. The story flowed really, really well and it was a great read. The added part about him forcing himself to go do the interview was really good and I think it was really realistic. Its nice to see a story where a character doesn't really want to do something but still does it because he knows that he needs to do it. I also loved how you showed enough of what had happened before, like her belief that he was too predictable. My favorite part was the ending. You brought the story full circle at the end and you worked the title into the end of it and I love that so much!
    July 6th, 2013 at 11:12pm
  • NinthLife

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    Comment Swap~
    Aha, first off I'd like to say how much I love the disclaimer. Usually I don't like to read fanfictions because they ruin my portrayal of the band member, but this one is actually really good. The writing and descriptions are amazing, and I actually find your portrayal of all the characters extremely believable. Please continue writing! This is really good.
    July 6th, 2013 at 10:47pm
  • vanduo

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    i was brought back to you by the comment swap.
    okay, so, first of all, i freakin' love the layout! :DD
    also, what a great coincidence that I was listening to BFMV song "Tears Don't Fall". I think this song suits your one-shot really well, ugh at least it got me into the mood perfectly.
    i enjoyed this story, i liked how you portrayed main character Matthew and how you ended eveyrthing really wants to only get more!
    July 6th, 2013 at 10:08pm
  • vanduo

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    i was brought back to you by the comment swap.
    okay, so, first of all, i freakin' love the layout! :DD
    also, what a great coincidence that I was listening to BFMV song "Tears Don't Fall". I think this song suits your one-shot really well, ugh at least it got me into the mood perfectly.
    i enjoyed this story, i liked how you portrayed main character Matthew and how you ended eveyrthing really wants to only get more!
    July 6th, 2013 at 10:08pm
  • Writer in the Rye

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    I will definitely check out Bullet For My Valentine!
    July 6th, 2013 at 08:36pm
  • Writer in the Rye

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    I don't know who Matthew Tuck is, however, I think your disclaimer is hilarious and immediately draws in the reader! Nice job on that. It's hard to write a one-shot that possess all the qualities full-length novels do and my goodness I think you've done it! You write with a certain effortless passion and I adore reading your works. It flows incredibly and there's the perfect balance between heartbreak and the discovery of new love. You are an extremely talented writer and I can't wait to see some more one-shots from you! A job well done!!

    Wishing you the best,

    Olivia
    July 6th, 2013 at 08:35pm
  • harley is awkward.

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    I was brought here by comment swap. Can I just say that first of all, I don't know who Matthew Tuck is? This however was really good. As far as one shots go, it was one of the better ones. I like the layout too. The blue is lovely. It was also kinda short and could possibly be made a little longer. I also didn't see any spelling errors or grammar mistakes so that's always a plus for me.

    I enjoyed reading it. :)

    Xoxo,
    Harley
    July 6th, 2013 at 05:13pm
  • swell

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    Compared to the other one shot I commented on, I find myself liking this one a lot more. I liked that you could read this one shot like an original fiction, so that I didn't need to know the fandom previously to read the story. Secondly, I liked the amount of description you put in, I felt that it added to the story and found it more interesting to read. I also liked that this story wasn't completely doom and gloom, that while in the beginning, Matt struggled with being himself because of the breakup with his girlfriend, but by the end of the story, things began to look up for him when he found a new girl that potentially had a heart worth breaking. Overall, I thought you did a top job!
    July 6th, 2013 at 02:07pm
  • ironically1234

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    So I dont really know who Matt Tuck is but I didn't find it ruined reading for me. It's kind of short for a one shot and I think you can make it longer. Other than that it's great! I loved how you described his celebrity in a really interesting way. Good job!
    June 30th, 2013 at 01:06am
  • Maddi;

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    As far as one shots go, I thought this was good! I thought the paragraph at the beginning (the second one) where you explained his looks may have gone into a little too much detail, just because that was boring to read right off the bat and I probably wouldn't have continued reading if it weren't for the comment. I just think it would have been nice to start off with something more attention grabbing than a description of his looks. And then later on you started talking about what he was wearing and how he was dressing and I thought that was just sort of unnecessary for a one shot to have all the details about little things that don't have much meaning to the story. Other than that, I think you did a really good job writing this!
    June 28th, 2013 at 09:45pm