July 9th, 2013 at 05:56pm
Comment Swap sent me here again, Sorry!!
Surprisingly, I haven't read a Batman fan fiction before!! :O
I'm glad this is my first though, because this is amazing! I can tell you're a natural writer and it shines through your use of imagery and characterization. Your writing is fast paced, but not too fast to the point I don't know what's going on, you've seen to have found that perfect balance!! You're a truly great author and I can't wait for more!!
God Bless,
Olivia
Your use of language is wonderful, the way you planned every paragraph out was really good, it looks to me like you knew exactly how you wanted this to play out. If I had one complaint though, your paragraphs are very long and they get a little boring at the length they are. But in saying that everything else about this is brilliant. I love your descriptions especially. Plus your layout is nice, maybe a tad small in the font, bit it suits this story well. Good job!