How to Be a Heartbreaker - Comments

I loved that you started each chapter off as a rule. I don't think I've seen anyone else do that before, and it's a really interesting way to tie the title into the chapters. I thought that was a really lovely touch.

Moving onto the story itself, I like that you portray Willa as this girl just out to have a good time in the first chapter, and then have her out the fact that she does have feelings for Charlie within the second chapter. It's almost like one of these fairytales where the girl starts off not believing in love and ends up completely infatuated with someone, almost like the guy changes her. I thought that was going to continue and be a slight cliché, but of course, you completely turn my expectations in the third chapter. It doesn't seem like as much of a fairytale as it did before. I was really surprised to find out that she was going to marry Charlie at the end but, like a few people have said, it does seem so overly realistic. I've known a few people in abusive relationships who delude themselves into thinking it will stop and that their partner is the only person who would ever truly love them, so that kind of hit really hard during the last chapter, especially when it's pointed out that Willa thinks that herself.

The last line really had a big impact though. Getting married is probably one of the most important decisions ever, and everyone always says you should be sure about it. Unless I'm reading into this too much, having her just think Charlie loves her kind of makes me think that even she doubts it, so she's not completely sure of it herself.

It's all very sad, really, because this does happen in real life. You've managed to portray something so real in such a beautiful manner, and I don't think I've read many pieces that can do that, so really well done.

This was truly beautiful to read from start to finish, and had a really good twist which I think no one expected. You are such a talented writer! Just wanted to put that out there...

Having a Lang Leav poem as your summary, and basing the story off a Marina & the Diamons song, was just wonderful! It set the tone nicely, so a very good choice. I also really like how the chapter titles were rules. My favourite was probably 'wear your heart on your cheek'.

Willa does aggrivate me a little but I kind of understand her situation since my sister was in a similar one. So I think you've written her very well and have written Charlie in the way to make the reader love him and hate him. Bravo!

Even though this is short, every chapter has an impact and I love that! The way you ended it was bittersweet. You felt really bad for the poor girl but at the same time she was getting her fairytale ending. It just made it a more memorable story.

I'm confused. Did she just marry the man that abuses her? Why? Why wouldn't she escape and leave him? But I like what CptLollipop said, it's realistic and most women do stay. It's really sad though.
Very well written story and I liked it. Just so sad for Willa though...

I love this story but I'm so frustrated with Willa. I mean I realize she's doing what women in an abusive relationship would do, and maybe that's the most frustrating part, how realistic it is. Please, please keep up dating C:

I was just going to read all the stories of yours that caught my eye, but then I started this one. And of course I started this one first. I love Marina & The Diamonds, and the rules and Willa and just. It took such a turn that really threw me off, but when I re-read the chapters out loud to my friend Ayla, I just thought, it's obvious. Moth to a flame? Flames burn, boys hurt you. You are a literary genius. I wish I could write a more constructive and mature comment, but I am just blown away by this and cannot wait to read what I am assuming is the final installment of this.

Okay, before I even read the story, you had me like YES with Marina & The Diamonds and a POEM BY LANG LEAV. Lang Leav is everything I aspire to be as a writer.

But this was completely unexpected. I love how you decided to base it off of the song. I adore how simple the chapters are, because they're so short but they have so much depth. Plus I think the short chapters really make the reader want more.

Then you really shocked me with the whole bruise thing. I was like, woah, he abused her? This whole thing made me really sad. I want the best for Willa!

Wow, this is really good.

At first I thought Charlie was this great guy who really cared about Willa and was going to be her prince charming. But then I read how Willa had a bruise and I'm thinking "did he cause that?" And by the end of the last chapter, I knew that she was in an abusive relationship. Poor Willa! Really hope she does get free.

Oh and I love the rule number..., so please keep doing that! :)

This took such a dark turn but I love it. This story wasn't at all what I expected it was going to be. It's so well written. Admittedly I normally prefer longer chapters, but I really enjoy this. I love how much character development has happened in a mere four chapters. I anxiously await the next update.

This is so good!