Steal Your Heart - Comments

Hello there! I received your story on comment-swap, and I'm so glad that I did. From the first chapter, I was sucked in by the way you set up your scenery. One thing that seemed awkward to me was when you would explain exactly how many of each item there were, like 50 columns and 10 bronze floor candle lamps. Skimming over that, it's really easy to feel like you're actually in the settings that you are describing.

I also like how you have your characters always doing something, like in the third chapter when the mother said hello, and she's smiling and has expression, rather than her just saying hello and sounding rather like a brick wall.

I did notice a few grammar errors. I can't think of any off the top of my head as I'm writing this comment, but I know they are there and it may be worth it to read the story out loud to yourself, and it will be easier to find words that are spelled incorrectly or used wrong.

Please update!!

Hello, I found your story on comment swap! :)

Some constructive criticism is that I would read over your chapters. There are a few spelling mistakes and it gets a little wordy at times in some parts. A helpful tip would be to read the story out-loud to yourself and sometimes then it is easier to pick up on the places that maybe need a few words to be deleted (sometimes less is more!).

Your first chapter was written very nicely. I love a good story that explains in detail of the setting, it sets for the mood for the story and I was drawn in, wanting to know where all of it was leading to. I also liked how there is a history between the characters that isn't told right away which leads to the reader guessing and reading onward to see where it all leads to. Definitely keeps the reader on their seat :)

aww :'( that was good though sad but good

OH NO HE DID NOT. garrett needs to quit being an ass, granted maddie did lie but DID HE HAVE TO BE RUDE IN FRONT OF WAVERLEY. yeah that was a good update though :)

Dude i'm really anxious to see more of how Garrett will be treating Nick, Maddie and epsecially Waverly! Loved the update!

well oh snap. i probably should have seen that coming, but i didnt. please update soon!

what in the world why is she going to boston?

this is really cute :) please update!

PLEASE UPDATE!