After Death - Comments

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Oh damn dis is interesting. I've never come across something like soooo update soon so I can read more. Kthnx.

I love stories like this, where characters are dead. HA sorry that made me sound really morbid, didn't it? But I meant reapers. I like the title too, because I feel like a lot of stories involving souls and limbo and what have you have dramatic titles, and yours is pretty much matter-of-fact. Like yup, this is what it's like after you die. And I dig that Harlow just talks over Hollis (love that name, by the way) and River pays a little (but not much) attention to Hollis. I can picture this happening like it's on a movie reel, seriously. Reading it was incredibly nice. But then I went back and looked at it, picking out my favourite things to comment about, and I noticed that you have a few errors. In one line, there's a space between the quotation mark and the word "Like". And actually most of the stuff I noticed has to do with dialogue, but there's this one part where you wrote "your's" instead of "yours". But it was cool that I managed to get through the whole thing without noticing any mistakes until the second time. I guess it means I was more into what was happening and your writing, instead. Recced and subbed!

Wow, this is really interesting. I haven't read anything like this before but you've gotten me hooked and I can't wait to see what happens!

Def subbing to this.

Whoa! I loooooove this. Please write more


Also River is cute

Oooo! I like this! I like this a lot! :D Love your description and the personality you gave the character!
Excited to see where this is going!