July 16th, 2013 at 09:51pm
I like how real this entire story is. Your characters have flaws and their relationship is terribly messed up and there's not happily-ever-after with the prince and princess type deal.
You made me feel for them, too. Their emotions were very apparent because of the way you wrote their story and that was really nice to see.
Your description was really nice as well. I liked how you described Rosanna and showed how she wasn't this gorgeous amazing person but yet Ben still loved her and still tried so hard to be with her.
The only thing that I wasn't a fan of was the color of the font. It was almost the same color as the backround which made it really hard to read. The rest of the layout was lovely though.
Good job!
Oh gosh, if this was posted just as a one-shot it would be great too. This story or chapter of a story made me really, really want to read it. I love how realistic you made the characters and how they weren't perfect people, though I know that's been said before. They were also completely unique of each other and I liked that.
I love how you ended the chapter, I really want to know about this couple and how they end up. It's so interesting and a great start.