City Cry Line - Comments

Holy shit, this was gorgeous. Seriously as the reader I could tell you have a knack for picking out the perfect words for description and it is lovely. Everything in this piece really hit me in the heart and I felt as I could really relate to this girl in the story.

Your writing style was so refreshing and clear to read, and I honestly found myself eating up every word. Though the plot is very sad, there is something bittersweet about it, and what the girl is experiencing. I think you wrote that perfectly. This was absolutely amazing and I'm happy that I read this!

First off, I really love both the title and the layout; they're beautiful!

Before I even get to the plot, I have to say I absolutely adore the way you describe things and how your description words are unique and refreshing to the reader. You're definitely an amazing writer!

Now onto the plot: It's so incredibly sad the loneliness she feels. I know exactly how that is. You could be friends with a million people who are constantly at your door, but it never fills the loneliness from a past lover, which you displayed perfectly. I just love this piece!

@ losing control.
Oh thank you I didn't even think I did that well with it, but I'm super happy you enjoyed it

Ah, I have too many feels all at the same time.

First, I adore the layout and title. The reason I wanted to read this story in the first place was because of the title and I'm really glad I did.

I listened to the song while I read this, and I really liked how well they matched together. You matched your writing style to the way they lyrics in the song are sung, and I really liked that.

Your descriptions were fantastic, I felt like I was looking out of a window in New York in the cold as I was reading it. I could tell exactly what your character was feeling and that was great.

I also really liked how you ended it. She seems kind of like she was just...sulking at the beginning, and by the end she did something and I liked how you built up to it.

Really well done.