May 27th, 2017 at 10:47am
There is always someone, who is terrified of something. They jump around at every little unexpected noise or things, and at times, they are even afraid of their own shadows. Fear of the dark is one of the most common phobias there is, and it was a great choice to pick, because it makes the story very realistic. Instead of writing this piece in a way the character describes a fear that he had for a long time, and doesn't know how to handle it, you wrote it in a way that readers could see how a simple thing as hearing noises in the dark, can be the beginning of a fear. I like that you created this story in the beginning perspective of the torment, that was going to follow for the rest of his life.
This was my favorite quote of this story, because it represents the never ending cycle of his fear. It symbolizes, that he is going through something, that might never end. It might last, until his dying days, and that is what makes this piece great, even though it is a sad reality for people, who really go through with it.
- Quote
- I still fear what lies in the darkness, the nothingness that seems to be everywhere.
It also makes a very profound quote, almost feeling like Edgar Allan Poe himself or other great ones created it. If the intention was to make a point for the character, you did a great job!
To be honest, I wasn't afraid. It didn't give chills like other stories you have created to make that point, and I wish it would have been at least a little scary to read, but overall, it was written with the intention to complete with the objective of the contest, which was to write about the fear of the dark.
Good Luck!
Christie
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you have a very interesting set-up w/ this. 'i was kind of drunk & wet,' possible that the course of everything that was conjured here was the effects of the mind under intoxication? just my personal theory here @ 1:45AM. in the dark. lol. i think what's so eerie about this is waking up to a sound you're trying to pinpoint but not finding it. something's there, sober or not! your mind's not going to forget that & after my psychological assessment, that brand of fear is just going to be in you till god looks over your soul.
you have a very poetic meaning @ the end of this passage & i love it. are you scared of what it means? thank you for creeping me out late @ night. i'm going to go watch some fancy cartoon to get my mind off what goes bump in the night.