have to say, I usually do not read stories like these. It isn't my type of story and it never has been.
But your story was really good, and well-written. I liked your descriptions, and I think it wasn't too detail-ridden, which is great to see. I think you have a good grasp on how a fantasy story is supposed to be written and this story must be one of the best on here.
You create characters well, and create a world that the reader can see vividly in their mind. However, the one thing I didn't like was that it seemed like there was too much dialogue. While I like dialogue, I think you could cut down on it a little bit so it doesn't distract from your amazing description!
Keep writing this, it has a lot of potential. Good luck. :)
But your story was really good, and well-written. I liked your descriptions, and I think it wasn't too detail-ridden, which is great to see. I think you have a good grasp on how a fantasy story is supposed to be written and this story must be one of the best on here.
You create characters well, and create a world that the reader can see vividly in their mind. However, the one thing I didn't like was that it seemed like there was too much dialogue. While I like dialogue, I think you could cut down on it a little bit so it doesn't distract from your amazing description!
Keep writing this, it has a lot of potential. Good luck. :)