A Dream of Sanctuary - Comments

This was fantastic. Your descriptions and word choice were amazing, and you went with the mystery and eerie feeling that Poe has in his poems really well.

I liked how you created a whole new, original world, but still kept it the same as any other world would be, in a way. You had a group of people, who were all kind of split into "cliques" for lack of a better word, and there were rebels and ah. It make your world seem a lot more realistic, I think, but still kept it unique and fantasy-like.

Your descriptions were AMAZING. Everything was so clear in my mind, but you didn't give too much away so it still kept that mystery.

I loved it, well done.

"Based off of Edgar Allan Poe's The City in the Sea." Well, congratulations. All you needed was that to make the English major in me happy. I was immediately excited to read this.

But wow. This story had an amazing feel to it. It was eerie, mysterious and intriguing--everything a story related to Poe should be. You pulled all of those off extremely well, and I think you're going to have a good chance in that contest you have entered this in.

I was amazed at how original and creative the plot of this is. You give a lot of details and you create a different world that the reader can lose themselves in. Well done on that.

I was a bit confused on the whole Fish thing, but that was interesting to me and I'm happy that I was confused. I liked that air of mystery. Good job!

Okay, this is very amazing. I guess I could say that this is wonderful. The way it's written is completely original. I love stories written like this one, and it's so hard to find one that is written well. I do mean that. I have found so few stories written like this.

I have to say I love your details. I don't know what it is about details for me. I guess that if you put too much into the story is too much? The details give you the perfect image, and let's the reader (me) wonder about what it would be like to live in the story.

It has the feel of Edgar Allen Poe who happens to be one of my favorite writers. It has that eerie feel to it that makes wonder what's around the corner. Like is it one of the Queen's soldiers or is just a little girl chewing a piece of bubble gum if you are understanding what I mean by that.

You are a very talented writer.

Well now wasn't that a twist in only the first paragraph! This is most certainly a very, very original idea! I have actually never read a story told in the point of view of a fish, I actually found myself re reading over that sentence I was like ''my eyes must be playing tricks on me again!''. I really like that idea though, it sets you far from the crowd on Mibba, which is always a good thing. I like the way you've described things, and the layout is just lovely, when I saw the skull I automatically wanted to read this (I have a thing for skulls ) Anyway, I really, really loved this. I wish you the very very best of luck in that contest you've entered this in. You deserve to win! Good job.