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Oh my this is so sick and twisted and its awesome! I'm only at the 10th chapter but I am so addicted! Your style is amazing and I somehow admire you for your sick and brilliant mind and creativity! You're amazing, please keep on writing, I love it! xoxo

I absolutely loved your story and I have for a while now :) You're an amazing writer and I enjoy the creativity you create. I might suggest writing something about her daughter? I mean, having a mother like Charlotte Evans, and a family including H7? She would have to find out about everything sometime, and I believe that would be a great story line. Like, how she deals with the revelations and such. Just how her life has turned out. I also have no doubt that she would turn out like her parents. I don't know, it's just a suggestion on something that I, personally, would enjoy reading. Thank you for an amazing read though!

Fabulous story ! :)

I cant believe its over. It was such an amazing story. And you really should consider doing the spin off idea :)

Loved the ending. It was sweet. :) I didnt think I was going to be okay with the story ending because I was loving it so much. But the ending came with perfect closure. Thank you for sharing your writing talents with us! :D

It would be awesome if you did a spin off of the daughter(Delilah right?), but could you link it to the story if you do just so it's easier to find and read it? I would love it!
I loved this story too, I'm going to miss it :(

Omg!!!! That was... a surprise. It ended as well as it could, I suppose. I'm glad she ended things with Aaron. I managed to stomach everything thus far, but it had to end. I would love a spin-off about Delilah. It's a marvelous idea.

OH my god I'm seriously going to cry. My eyes are tearing up right now, gah! This was absolutely perfect, and oh my goodness, if you could write more on this story, then I would totally read it. I absolutely loved your work, and I want to see what else you've written. Thank you so much for this amazing story <3 I always looked forward to getting my story update emails. :3

Wonderful ending!! It was perfect!

Im SO glad there's one more chapter!!!

@callusedsilk: I understand where you are coming from with the difference between consensual sex and rape. But, there are also different kinds of people in this world. Maybe for this story the line is gray. People see the world through different eyes. There are some people who like to live on the edge in a more sexually open manner. Maybe Charlotte and her brother are those people. Not all things that are "wrong" in the public's eye are cemented into the rules of life. That being said... I understand that because this is a public story and those warnings should be worked into the intro because they can be startling when you are not expecting it.

@tracicita.marie: I am sad to see that there is only 1 more chapter left. I am excited to see how exactly you will end the story and if there will be a jump in time to see what happens 10 years from the end of the story. You said earlier in the story that you will not be doing a sequel, which I understand. You may not want to drag it out. But, I would be interested in a spin off of this story that follows the life of Delilah. That could be super awesome and it would give you another avenue to follow. Sorry I haven't been commenting. Work is picking up here. XD Can't wait to read the last chapter.

NOOOOOOOO!!!! I love this story! It's my favourite! I can't believe it's ending :'( Still a great story tho.

The next chapter is the last!?!?!? This one wasn't nearly long enough... Charlotte's attitude problem is getting old. The evolution of her character was very interesting and sweet, but she isn't much of a person with no humanity left. She'll just be like everyone else then and there won't be anything special

@ CallusedSilk
Of course, why get upset because you noticed something I may have overlooked? If I couldn't handle the criticism or the feedback, I wouldn't have written such a controversial story.

Thank you again

@ tracicita.marie
Thank you so much for being awesome about it, and I figured you weren't condoning any of it, but the internet is weird.

Also since I did have a shitload of stuff that I wrote and probably should have split it up into more than one post, remember to move the character images from the long summary into an actual character page.

@ CallusedSilk
I genuinely appreciate the feedback. I have addressed some of your concerns. I did remove the bad link and moved the link in ch 8.

As for the other part, I have prefaced on the summary page that I in no way condone rape or abuse of any kind. This story is not meant to lead people to believe that what is happening between them is love. Thank you for being honest with me and I'm sorry if anything I wrote offended you or concerned you.

Wow, I didnt see that coming at all...and I cant believe this story is almost over. Are you going to write a prequel? Please do. I really enjoy this story

Wow that was a tad freightening. Did not see that coming.

All right, just found this story and going to give some constructive criticism. First thing's first, I'm going to talk about things from the story guidelines. That being that the layout has to be legible, and I found it not that great. At the very least, I recommend changing the color of the text to make it stand out more against the dark background. Next order of business is that you are not allowed to have links to character images in your long summary. You have to set up a character page for those. Also, on top of that, just a heads up to the fact that the second Charlotte image link no longer goes to a working image. Within the story itself, just a reminder that links are also not allowed within the content of the chapter either. So, such as in chapter 8 with the link to a youtube video? That link needs to be moved to the author's note.

As for content, I'm going to preface this all with saying that if there was a rating higher than NC-17, I'd recommend this story for it. At the very least, this story is a prime example of how NC-17 just doesn't quite cover it. It's well written, but in the way that it did a good job in horrifying me and making me gag. I also so far wish you'd somehow, whether in the author's note or have someone else spell out that Aaron is a rapist. I know it's from Charlotte's point of view, so she's confused, but please remind everyone (because it actually isn't known rampantly throughout everyone) that a physiological response to abuse (such as the vaginal area becoming lubricated after being touched) is not a sign that it's actually wanted. Also, a teen touching and kissing his much younger sister is not love, it's serious abuse. I'm in no way saying you're trying to get that across with your story, but as a writer, make sure that's not the message anyone takes away from it. Especially since your own disclaimer for the story doesn't have the words 'rape' or 'child abuse' or anything like that to really prepare people for what's in this story. Sex and violence are in it, but most of it has been rape and molestation.

In an author's note you said you warned us about 'sex', so we shouldn't complain, but the fact of the matter is that whether Delilah and Charlotte had sex and not abuse is a debatable area. However, Aaron and Charlotte was not sex, it was rape and shouldn't be called anything else.

And I have to admit I only made it 18 chapters before giving up. The story is too much and even just glancing through the comments, I'm cringing, because my fears about people not realizing what's going on have been confirmed. People claiming Charlotte 'loves' Aaron a lot or excited that she got with Donovan or Murdock. The fact of the matter is that as long as there is a power dynamic where they abuse her and hold her life in their hands, there will be no such thing as consensual sex between Charlotte and any of the men. It's not 'love' between Charlotte and it may not be your intention, but it looks like you've successfully romanticized rape.

I just started, and caught up. Delilah was a surprise, but in retrospect, the name should have given it away. When's the next update?