August 3rd, 2013 at 03:12pm
hahah I'm glad! It made me smile writing it and ending the story that way, so hearing that you reacted the same way just made my day. Thank you
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@ jazter
hahah I'm glad! It made me smile writing it and ending the story that way, so hearing that you reacted the same way just made my day. Thank you July 28th, 2013 at 07:09pm -
The repeating of "please don't cry" made me laugh.July 28th, 2013 at 06:44pm
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@ Overrated.
Thanks
July 27th, 2013 at 02:53pm -
This was so cute. I loved the relationship between her and Shaw along with the relationship with her brother. What happened to her brother shaped this entire story and I really enjoyed it. I loved how it all came together and showed so much progression. :)July 27th, 2013 at 12:30am
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*comment swap* so this was a different to read. I honestly don't know much about the game of hockey or any of the players. I like ur layout and back ground very touching. Your summary is great. The way u show her hurt and concussion is good. showing the dynamic of her relationship with shaw and how its evolved over time you've nailed it. I'd suggest adding more about her relationship with her twin and some of the things she loves and hate about it. show the importants of that relationship as well has her and shaw. Other then that this story has great potential. keep up the great workJuly 25th, 2013 at 11:47pm
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@ lilynotlyla
Thanks! I wanted her strong feelings about hockey to be a huge part of her relationship with Shaw, so naturally her relationship with her brother followed. July 25th, 2013 at 04:18am -
I like that you not only included the dynamic with Shaw, but also gave us insight to her relationship with her brother. I think it really helps the story along. Nice work.July 25th, 2013 at 02:30am
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Something about tears can make a strong man come undone. Something so small makes them feel so helpless.