Their Body. - Comments

Wow, this was really intense. I loved the detailed and descriptive words and the emotion poured into this story was phenomenal! Amazing job on this and my only wish was that this was a chaptered story! If you ever make it I to one, please message me!

This was intense, like for real. I just don't even know what to say about this because I guess I am left in shock about what exactly I just read. It made me a little uncomfortable to read, but maybe that was the point. The main character herself felt uncomfortable, like she didn't want what was happening to her, and I guess it just passes itself onto the reader. That's something I don't usually see or feel when reading short stories, but it happened when I read this, which is pretty awesome in itself.

I felt that the emotion wasn't as obvious as I've seen in stories, but it is there, woven into the description that is this short story. I think the one thing that is as clear as day is the fact that she doesn't want it, but everything else is not as obvious as that. Anyway, this was really well written and I really liked it.

Oh my god, this is written so well, that the story makes me uncomfortable. Just the idea of everything she's feeling and everything she's happening makes me like, NEED a protective hug, from my boyfriend. This is really great and I wish you luck in your contests.