Can't Stand It - Comments

I quite like your title, but I do wish you'd had a summary of some sorts. I have no idea what I'm getting into, apart from the fact that I know who's going to be in the story. You really want to have a hook of some sort to capture your reader's attention.

I think the start is absolutely adorable, but things started to get a bit confusing when it came to ring-shopping. Basically, I had no idea Craig had even looked at the rings in the homophobic man's story, let alone found the perfect one.
Also, I struggle to see how the woman's dad would accept that she's engaged - surely he'd notice the ring and then ask questions. It's a little detail, and you could leave it as is, I just found it a bit strange.

The song-proposal was a little cheesy but it suited perfectly and gave all the necessary warm fuzzies.

I really think you should've ended the story just after the proposal though. The ten years later bit really ruined this story for me. It was all "this happened, then this, and he died, the end." There was no emotion, and very little development. It felt disconnected to the rest of the piece, which was very disappointing.

You do have a few grammar things to sort out, but they are very minor. If you'd like though, I'm happy to talk to you about them. But overall, this was very cute.

Good luck in the contest.

Mer. Why do you have to hit me with feels...? I was so very sad! I feel like it was slightly rushed though and could have been done a littllleeeee bit better if it was more explained. THAT IS NOT SAYING I DIDN'T LIKE IT. :) Because I actually really did. Great job! :)

@ Snow.White.Queen.

I never did change the font. I pretty much forgot about that. I love mpregs. I haven't read much but that's cause I'm lazy xD. TJ and Michael are just other members of ETF. I was writing and that's where my creativity went. I questioned it a little but just left it xD. As for the banner, thank you! I made it.

Thank you for your comment. Tis greatly appreciated :3

Thank you for entering my contest! This is your comment dear.

Well firstly, your banner is lovely, whoever made that should be proud! The rest of the layout is nice, I'm not a huge fan of the font you used, but it's readable. Your idea is very good, although I haven't read many m-pregs so I can't say that's it original. But for me it was, so that's awesome. I would have liked a little more background information on some of the other characters, TJ and Michael kind of just sprung up on me, I was like who are these people? But never the less, this is a great piece! You have good chances in the contests