Puppet on the Stage - Comments

Wowwww. I envy your mad skills. That was really moving and shocking and really REALLY great.

As short as this was, I loved the dark elements you put into this. Eddie was a total douchebag, and I feel so bad for Liv. This was really, really good. I wish I could write as good as you.
Beautiful job, I really enjoyed this.

Wow. Oh my goodness. This was so intense and amazing. I don't know if anyone has said this before, but I just wanted to tell you that Eddie made me so mad. I thought he was sorry the first time, but I guess that wasn't true. Gosh, he just made me so mad, especially at the end of the short story. He was all his fault.

But anyway, I really liked reading this because I guess it shows the dark side of drug addiction without going into too much detail, if that makes any sense. I don't usually read stories about drugs so I haven't been exposed to much, but I do have to say that this is one of the more realistic stories that I've seen, and I have found it important to be realistic when it comes to a topic such as this one. Before I start rambling, I want to tell you that this was completely amazing.

I'm not really sure how to feel after reading that. I'm definitely going to read Uppers, Downers, All Arounders after I comment, because I want to read more about these characters.

I have conflicting emotions because this was dark, but I adore your dark stuff so much. I want to feel sad, but your fantastic writing makes me happy. I dunno, too many feels, girl.

I like how realistic you were about addiction without describing every little detail of it. You wrote it in a way that really got Liv's desperation across, and showed what drugs do to people's lives.

I feel so sorry for Liv, and as much as I don't want to, I feel sorry for Eddie as well. As much as I want to think that he's a jerk for giving her the drugs, he was just as addicted as her.

Anyways, gorgeous story, well done. <3

I was actually going to comment on this first before I saw the link to Uppers, Downers, All Arounders, and I went and read that.

And now I feel like I've got a fresher, cleaner view on this story. And holy cow, girl. I just saw a comment that said this is dark, and I so agree that it is. But at the same time it was weirdly light. (idk maybe it's the layout). But I kind of got the same feeling that I got reading your other story, like everything was blurry and slow. Except this time it was slightly less, and more of a "oh, wow, I did not expect that" or "I can't believe that just happened". Gosh I feel so sorry for Liv. And even though I'd say it's his fault, I feel so sorry for Eddie, too. I can't imagine how he must've felt, knowing that. And as usual, favourite sentence time! It's the last one. Something about it is so soothing.

It isn't so often that I read stories that make me go oh gosh as I'm reading them and this drabble did just that. It was so dark, but exciting all at the same time. You are really talented, boo. You have a way of taking dark things and make them extremely interesting. You make the reader want to read more.

I felt a lot of emotion for the characters in this story, which is a good thing. You wrote them so well, and packed a lot of their emotion into this one little drabble. I could almost feel Liv's desperation as I read through the story.

I liked how the rest of the characters also reassured her as well. This was unique and wonderfully written. I loved it. :)

I definitely agree with Jefferson Starships, this was dark. I'm not used to reading stuff this dark, but holy hell. I was impressed with the way that you managed to keep it fairly light at the beginning and it just descended into this spiral of someone completely losing control of themselves. You've used short and snappy sentences in places that set up a really good sense of atmosphere. It also seems in my opinion to show a lot about the narrator's personality and how uncomfortable she seems to feel throughout the whole process. It's interesting to read about this sort of thing, because it does seem so real and possible.

I'll be announcing the winners of the contest at some point within the next week, so good luck!

This was actually really dark but with the little words you used (were allowed to use lol) not very detailed enough to be cringe worthy. Just enough to understand her struggle, how she was put into it, and how she dealt with it after. Wooooow, I listened to the song as I read and it really enhanced it. Lemme just say you have grrrreat flow, as mentioned earlier, BUT YOU DO, and this was fantastic, I'm gonna rec it too.

I entered in the same contest ya know? I was given less words than you!!! 100-150 Good luck on it!

Just looking at the layout, I'm excited to see more. It's really simple and pretty. The summary is lyrics if I'm not mistaken, so it doesn't really give anything away. I really like it, it's something that I did in Unholy Creatures to create suspense on what the story was really all about. I'm definitely excited as I click onto the link to the first chapter.

I am completely blown away. You are so talented. I'm completely jealous of the way you write, it's so poetic and brilliant. I'm trying to leave a decent comment, because the one you left me was so helpful and descriptive. I'm going to re-read it for errors, but if there isn't away, I'm just going to have to gush some more, because yeah, this is brilliant.

Okay, so my personal preference would be to put a comma after "your smile" in the first paragraph. When I read it out loud, I kind of put the comma in naturally, but I don't think it has to be there.
You put a capital 'T' on "They" in the 6th paragraph, but it should be lowercase.
The word "i'm" needs a capital 'I' in the 10th paragraph.
"People in white" should be "people in white", I think.

Wow! It's so haunting and really sticks with you. I'm going to recommend this brilliance and I'm even gonna' throw in a free comment on the other Liv and Eddie story because they're my drug now. I'm completely addicted. Amazing.

Holy poop! How amazing! The first line I was hooked! This is such heavy, intense writing that was amazing! I didn't see any mistakes, and it all flowed great.

It actually made me sad why Liz had to go through. My favorite line is definitely about the good men calling the police. It actually gave me chills!

Great writing, and great flow! I wish I could see the layout, but I'm on my phone so I can't, but the story itself is great.

Jesus Christ babe, that's fucking heavy.
Brilliant and wonderful but heavy.
I felt bad for Liv and wanted to fucking cry. Its all bad what happened to her and I hope Eddie gets what's coming to him.

It was beautifully dark.
Wonderful.
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