Love it! Could you separate speech and paragraphs more as it's confusing to read, but it's great, just the right pace :) update soon please!
July 5th, 2014 at 09:01pm
She May Not Belong to One of Us, but She Belongs to All of Us - Comments
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CuteJuly 5th, 2014 at 08:33pm
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I love this story and can't wait for more. Please update again soon. Xxx
July 5th, 2014 at 07:45pm -
I am hooked on this story! Please update soon!June 15th, 2014 at 08:03pm
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More detail on how she feels.
Different POV's
You don't want to move too slow, but then again you don't want too fast, do what you thinks makes the story better.:)June 15th, 2014 at 06:12am -
Erm....maybe try finding an editor? I'd help but I don't really have a computer to do it with, I'm using my phone :/June 15th, 2014 at 05:03am
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Awww, can't wait for more!June 1st, 2014 at 10:57am
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Awe....that was absolutely adorable!!!June 1st, 2014 at 07:05am
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What's wrong with Jimmy?! At least there's someone there to comfort her!
Love this, update soon!May 23rd, 2014 at 09:36am -
Good to see someone else there to help herMay 20th, 2014 at 10:43pm
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Damn.....Jimmy made her cry :(May 20th, 2014 at 09:49pm
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JImmy is so damn awesome!!May 6th, 2014 at 10:19pm
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I love it! Please update soon.May 6th, 2014 at 02:30am
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May 6th, 2014 at 02:30am
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Wow. Update soon!May 5th, 2014 at 11:30am
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"If you don’t believe me, when we get back to the house I’ll let you feel for yourself."
My god!May 5th, 2014 at 04:51am -
I think it's Shadows who helps her.
Update very soon!!!May 4th, 2014 at 09:10am -
Good story! I'm thinking it's Jimmy.May 3rd, 2014 at 06:51am
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I pray it's Gates that has her. Please continue soon.May 3rd, 2014 at 02:04am
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I pray it's Gates that has her. Please continue soon.May 3rd, 2014 at 02:04am
