July 26th, 2013 at 04:38pm
So, I didn't find any grammar or spelling mistakes. I tend to read fast, so if I missed any, I'm sure it's not anything to worry about.
I like your style! It's very unique but I totally dig it. There's an alluring feeling to the style, and to this concept that you've written so I like it a lot.
I like the layout, as well. It's simple but nice an easy to read. So good job!
everything you could have used
In this sentence, you used present tense (they burst) so the correct phrasing is everything you can use.
ever well-known face
every well-known face
II, third paragraph -
seconds melting away
Just sounds strange? The next sentence says they were trying to outrun time, so maybe a better phrasing would be seconds chasing them or simply seconds running (faster). Just a thought!
OTHERWISE, it's literally perfect. i'm watching Sherlock, started just about a week ago and I'm going to watch The Reichenbach Fall today! I already know how it ends because of Tumblr and, and -creys-. Anyway, as far as I am concerned, there's nothing here out of character. OF COURSE, John would follow him. OF COURSE, they'd get in serious trouble someday. OF COURSE, Sherlock would lose it.
Sherlock often breaks due to John, he's got a little soft spot for him. This was, indeed, a symphony. It vibes classy, rhythm, ya know? Your writing style, at least in this, is very thought out, well phrased, and long winded (in a good way). So, of course I liked it! I probably would have started crying if this was like an episode or something and Sherlock started crying. -Johnlock right in the feels...