Dream Girl - Comments

Here judging the first round of Sixth Time's the Charm!

This is a really interesting piece! I read through it once and got slightly confused, but I think I got the idea the second time around. I love that it seems as if she's a ghost or a spirit of some sort, but she doesn't seem to realise it. I've been watching a lot of Supernatural lately and it's a really interesting concept that keeps cropping up. I'm really glad to see that she seems to continue to watch over her fiancé, even when he moves on from her.

The last line was really atmospheric. I don't know what I'm taking from the ending, but it just seems so final and...I don't know, it really works. This piece has this kind of sweet theme to it, but then it has this really dark undertone that I absolutely adore. You've done a fantastic job!

I love stories like these. They manage to tell a lot while keeping it short, and I believe that you pulled it off perfectly. This one is definitely one of my favourites so far, even if I'm not saying much here. Overall, I really liked this, and I love how you incorporated the words into the story. Honestly, I don't think I have anything to complain about.
Thanks a bunch, I really enjoyed this and you did very well